The great fame

There are dreams that just don't come true. It is a piece i drafted from one of my stories

Life is all about wanting to succeed
And the poor just to get rich
And the rich wanting to get wealthy
But what a pity, things don't always get in order
But then you discover the big secret
Dreams!
They always can fetch greatness
And then you searched
Deep!
And then deeper
But you couldn't find it
And then you slept
In your sleep it appeared
But a con
And a trick
They don't first give a real id
And the dream
Seems not to fetch you an happy ending
And hope then fades out of your tender heart

If my day is bright
Then my night is dark
If today brings fame
Tomorrow may bring shame
When a bloke is broke
And a dame is lame
Then he stole some cloth
To tame the dame
Then a blade strayed
And the dame was slayed
Then the great fame
He dreamt will stay
Failed to stay.

Reviews

[Ellen Hammond]

Wow! You not only put the last part of this into a better form but adde quite a bit before it. I like the layout of this one and the rhythm and flow especially the last stanza. Very nice rewrite. I enjoyed reading it again. Keep writing!