Immortal I'd Love It

An older piece, but I'm feeling it tonight

My body’s hurting.
My legs are sore.
My heart’s stopped beating.
Never been here before.

I feel myself on the edge of mortality.
I feel my life slipping out of my palms.
I fear myself on the edge of mortality.
They said that I’d be, but I’m not at all calm.
Never feared death.
I do now.
What would I leave,
If I died now?

I’ve been given a death sentence.
I’ve done nothing wrong.
What ever happened to penance?
I haven’t got long.

I feel myself on the edge of mortality
I feel my life slipping out of my palms.
I fear myself on the edge of mortality.
They said that I’d be, but I’m not at all calm.
Never feared death.
I do now.
What would I leave,
If I died now?

Fear and death.             (Edge of mortality.
Death and fear.               Life is slipping away.
Fear of death.                 Edge of mortality.
Death from fear.              Not at all calm.
Fear and death.              Edge of mortality.
Death and fear.               Life is slipping away.
Fear of death.                 Edge of mortality.
Death from fear.              Slips from my palms.)

My fear of death is killing me.
Wish I hadn’t known.
Since the problem in my heart I’ve seen,
The problems only grown.

Author's Note

This is written as a song
The two stanzas side-by-side are to be sung in counterpoint
Tell me what ya think

Reviews

[WriterMe]

Wow this was great. I'd love to heart the beat that goes along with it. First i thought it was a very detailed poem, but when you said it was suppose to be a song, then it made it even better. Great work =]