how they hate

u dont see how u hurt me

when u kicked me in the stomach

and u lost our baby

when u were drunk

u killed urself by drink driving

and im happy to say ur gone

lost

never to be seen again

im glad ur dead

but ur family are after me.

ur brothers and sisters

ur mum and dad

how do i get away

i never killed u

why do they hate me

please stop them...

Reviews

[Fabric Pulse]

I'm not going so much focus on the spelling errors and all that, but the message. It was so sad but strongly powerful and in your face. It screamed "help me" and nothing less. I'm very sorry for your losses and hopefully the people will come to their right senses. God bless.

[Lowesy]

.........well now that was interesting. You should replace the 'u's with 'you' and put some sort of punctuation at the end of some lines. It doesn't seem like a poem, not because some of it doesn't rhyme, free verse poems don't rhyme. However, each line, to me anyway, seems to be a just a sentence, not one that follows on to the next line. Does that make sense? Maybe the use of punctuation will help but we'll see.
Strong storyline, talking about your life as your bio says. Seems like a tragic story and I'm sorry.
If you were to spruce this up with the punctuation and capitals and 'you's then you could have a decent little poem here.
Mark
PS. try typing the poem out in paragraph form rather than stanzas and line then break it up where you feel like it.