Frozen

The season of winter is a beauty to behold.

Frozen

The bitter winds swirl…..
Our scarlet cheeks flame and plume….
Frigid embraces....

Author's Note

I think this is a haiku. I have NO experience whatsoever with them. I had actually wrote this months ago but I didn't know whether or not I should post it.... I decided to take a leap here. Criticism is welcomed and valued.

Version 2– **EDIT ** : I changed the ' feather ' part, as I did agree with Dragon. The feather was there for a reason but... it might've been misleading.. :)

I believe this is the second one I've wrote in my short lifetime?

Reviews

[~Dragon X]

Heh, Haikus are pretty difficult to sound smooth with strict rules. This is great! :D The only thing I would suggest improving is the last line. Is it a real feather? I dunno, it just seems like it's changing the topic matter. If you like it ignore me. XD

[SylphXanas]

I did try doing some haiku a few years ago, they feel nothing like yours. Yours hold pictures in the mind. This has now set me off to find others who will make me think again about what i have set in cement.

[Miss Evans]

It's different than what I think you usually write, and it could probably classify as a haiku.

Can't really say much more than that... It's just different.

[Summer'sBreeze]

i like it

[Ami N.]

Nice :) I honestly don't like restricting myself to a certain pattern, so I don't prefer writing haikus myself. But reading others is interesting. I like this piece, you captured wisps of the winter chill nicely :)

[A. L. Allen]

I like this one. Haikus have always been a mystery to me, and I will probably never be able to pull them off. :) I like how you have the warm nestled in between two colds, and the imagery is, yet again, stunning- and in so simple word too!

Nice job!

[Jasmine Thousand]

I love winter. And I love the imagery in this poem, it's lovely and sweet! I'm not sure if this is a haiku either. I have a grudge against writing them so I can't say!
~Jasmine Thousand~

[Miki]

I don't have much experience with haiku poetry either, hehe. I enjoyed this haiku nonetheless though, good job. :)

-Mikayla W.