Two poems

haiku two maybe

With Apology to…Basho

 

On Destiny

 

Pine straw in her beak

Motherbird,  nest weaver, works

Patient cat awaits

 

 

Another Opinion of Spring

 

Cold snow has fallen,

White over mantles the green.

Youth?  But a memory.

Reviews

[Papaya]

My daughter and I wrote a few haiku poems this evening. about spring.
I'll have to show her yours and see what she thinks :)

It seems the common thread between the two is the pending doom.
The clutches of the cat, the clutches of old age. A looming threat.

And then of course we have the birth in the one, new life and the aging of the other, life leaving.
Is that what they call juxtaposition when you have to extremes presented by side?

I guess the conclusion I am drawing is that I like them both and can interpret their meanings in different ways.

And silly me, I had to google Basho and I am so happy I am walking away with a bonus nugget from your writing. Enjoyed. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

Beautiful review. The beautiful part is the part about you and your daughter writing together. That is what you call juxtaposition, or should, at least I do.

[Papaya]

ok. I got it right. :)
and thank you. she likes writing 'hikoos' :)
nice to read your clever words Delmar

[Cherrie Palmer]

I play that memory on a loop and forget sometimes those days weren't yesterday. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

If a thing seems like yesterday it was. Clocks and calendars are intended to be conveniences. If inconvenient ignore them.

[Cherrie Palmer]

I'll go for that

[‘Thoughts In Time..]

In the eye of the beholder- never allow dreams to cease and the mind to wander - opening doors to destiny waiting upon hopeful hearts to uncover and carry out many a hearts desire- limited only to the thoughts of time within ones mind...🌹

[Delmar Cooper]

I live in Alabama, after Florida we are the buggiest state in the Earth and every summer the beholders around here have these little gnats that fly into your eyes and kinda get stuck under the lid. It's hell when they try to crawl out.

[Chris]

I call this - Tru-isms. Quite thought-full.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for looking and your comment. Yeah, I have a gift for the obvious.

[Chris]

Gift - yes. Obvious ...seldom.

[Paul Bell]

I think Basho stuck to what he was good at. But sometimes less is best if it hits you.
Like the idea of the patient cat just waiting. You know it will be rewarded.
Wonder if I spoke about the weather when I was young. Maybe too busy living.
Where did that youth go to, did it just pass me by. Should have kept a diary.

[Delmar Cooper]

I had a teach who kept a weather diary his whole life. That to me is a surer sign of a wasted youth than a proficiency at billiards.

[Paul Bell]

Definitely. Billiards is skill.

[h d e rushin]

interesting word usage my friend. Waiting is the slave of patience. it beats it bloody with the lash of
circumstance. I shoveled my walk way this morning, April 17, 2018, 31 degrees, 23 with the wind chill. / dana

[Delmar Cooper]

I like your quote about waiting. I didn't like this: "I shoveled my walk way this morning, April 17, 2018, 31 degrees, 23 with the wind chill. / dana"

Move. Move soon. My plants have graduated from the seed packet to the the cold frame and are now in open revolt. I must plant them soon or risk the insurrection. Thank you for reading and most of all thank you for writing.

[RomaineCoppola]

Beautiful stuff. Maybe I need to appreciate the Haiku a little more...

[Delmar Cooper]

I think those things must sound better and be more elegant in the Japanese language. I like the brevity of the haiku but I can't say I understand the attraction of the things.

[Mrudula Rani]

Your haiku are perfect! You are apologizing to Basho because you didn't write them in Japanese language?

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you very much for reading and for your uplifting comment.

[emmajoy]

Distinct, delightful, (though that first just a touch dangerous, perhaps!.. Your words aren't merely well drawn but show how - both brief manuals of how to make and leave an impression.

[Neville]

It matters not
What matters is, they are both fantastic nuff said....................N

[Delmar Cooper]

Computer issues have slowed me down. So belatedly, let me say thanks for reading and your flattering comment.

[Neville]

and they are still fantastic........N