Two poems

haiku two maybe

With Apology to…Basho

 

On Destiny

 

Pine straw in her beak

Motherbird,  nest weaver, works

Patient cat awaits

 

 

Another Opinion of Spring

 

Cold snow has fallen,

White over mantles the green.

Youth?  But a memory.

Reviews

[Papaya]

My daughter and I wrote a few haiku poems this evening. about spring.
I'll have to show her yours and see what she thinks :)

It seems the common thread between the two is the pending doom.
The clutches of the cat, the clutches of old age. A looming threat.

And then of course we have the birth in the one, new life and the aging of the other, life leaving.
Is that what they call juxtaposition when you have to extremes presented by side?

I guess the conclusion I am drawing is that I like them both and can interpret their meanings in different ways.

And silly me, I had to google Basho and I am so happy I am walking away with a bonus nugget from your writing. Enjoyed. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

Beautiful review. The beautiful part is the part about you and your daughter writing together. That is what you call juxtaposition, or should, at least I do.

[Papaya]

ok. I got it right. :)
and thank you. she likes writing 'hikoos' :)
nice to read your clever words Delmar

[Onlyme]

Stunning haiku poems. Nothing else to be said.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for reading and for your gracious comment.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Jeff) why try. its obviously you cant write so stop trying to spark

[Delmar Cooper]

Let me start with the obvious question: Who is Jeff? I assume you are writing to him. Can't be me because I write very well and I'll be the first, and sometimes only one, to acknowledge it. I also use apostrophes in contractions and periods as end stops. More seriously, thanks for reading and stopping to comment. That says more to me than the masquerade personas some people create to stir controversy.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Micky) apparently this guys got rocks for brains.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Jeff) he thinks im talking to a different person then him

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Keven) See it from his point of veiw. Or cant you get your head that far up your a*s?

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Jeff) I could try

[Delmar Cooper]

This was confusing until I realized that Jeff and Keven are co-joined twins. But, you take fans however you can get them so I'm please to add you two to the club. For which of my numerous and splendid works do you most admire me for? Don't worry if the decision isn't completely unanimous, you can caucus among yourself until an agreement is reached. Take your time.

[The Immortal Phoenix]

(Micky) Jeff and Keven as conjoined twins. That would be rely bad. you need a head shrink boys.

[Davidgeo]

Hi. I like cats. Do you like cats too?

[Delmar Cooper]

Sure, but it's an acquired taste.

[Davidgeo]

Why would you say something like that?

[CD Campbell]

Hah. I miss your wit. Thanks for making me laugh today.

[Davidgeo]

Cat's are pretty hilarious. Tell me a story about well intentioned stupid people en masse...

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for the prompt but I only write fiction.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Beautiful haiku's
These types of poems require so much to say using very few words

[Delmar Cooper]

True, poetry is streamlined speech - language remodeled, transgendered, painted blue and turned upside down and inside out. Poetry is the chance to encapsulate some very important thing in a very few words. Thanks for reading.

[KCthelastboyscout]

Always a pleasure

[Lyn Anderson]

Simple yet complex, this treasure. I am especially fond of the last, pangs of nostalgia, my guess.

[Delmar Cooper]

Gee Lyn thanks. " am especially fond of the last, pangs of nostalgia, my guess." No nostalgia for me. Neuralgia maybe.

[Lyn Anderson]

I've missed you

[Beccy]

No apology needed.

Thoroughly enjoyed the both.

Beccy.

[Relic]

They're both pleasant reads and both pleasant surprises on this cloudy day.

So well done. :)

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading and commenting. Rain is just starting here.

[Chris Shaw]

Love both of these, multi-layered haikus. So clever. The hard working mother bird probably oblivious to that patient cat. I can relate this to the work place. Those waiting in the wings for me to retire so they could jump in my place. (they had a long wait). The second, speaks to me of the years slipping through your fingers. In my mind I still feel 18, but my body tells me the years are advancing. Thank you

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading and your comments. I had a cat like that. Sly b*****d.

[jacob erin-cilberto]

i really like the allegorical nature of both of these poems...can be literal..but also have other meanings dealing with humans, youth, protecting as parents do...etc.
nicely done haiku...

[Great Aunt Astri]

Great Universal thoughts here. It is the Motherbird, nest weaver, that is about to perish, ( OH the trials and tribulations of motherhood!). And OH what irony in your Spring haiku! But I took a second look at this one and decided it was quite optimistic. The 'spring ' of the old man may burst forth in fruitfulness in the GREAT BEYOND! I loved both! (PS my Can Mic save The Day story has now got an ending. I would appreciate your valued opinion!)

[Delmar Cooper]

I shall revisit that story today. Thanks for your comments.