Yes it makes perfect sense to me. Intellect is all very good and nice but to love and experience that bliss effectively we must leave Intellect behind. If you want to really feel in love, you have to close your eyes to the faults of the one you wish to love. The rose lenses just have tocome on to hide all those ugly parts. You can't love with harsh bright lights on or wyour minds eyelids open. So I find a lot of wisdom in this poetry. Someone who writes like this obviously knows a lot about relationships and that is to be applauded and learnt from. Thank you.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks for reading. I don't think you ever get a final degree on affection.
This is a fabulous poem. It has everything, including a large dollop of humour and advice. Also the lady has first class taste in music, even if she isn't an avid reader herself. Nothing wrong with Ella, she is tops as far as I am concerned. Where love is concerned, no one needs books. Great read Delmar. Yes your lines made me smile and they also reminded me of my Mum and Dad who adored Ella. I still rate her the top female vocalist ever.
Chris
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Glad I accidentally triggered a pleasant memory for you. So happy to hear you enjoyed the poem. I d.. read moreGlad I accidentally triggered a pleasant memory for you. So happy to hear you enjoyed the poem. I don't try much rhyme so this one was a happy accident in itself.
Yes it makes perfect sense to me. Intellect is all very good and nice but to love and experience that bliss effectively we must leave Intellect behind. If you want to really feel in love, you have to close your eyes to the faults of the one you wish to love. The rose lenses just have tocome on to hide all those ugly parts. You can't love with harsh bright lights on or wyour minds eyelids open. So I find a lot of wisdom in this poetry. Someone who writes like this obviously knows a lot about relationships and that is to be applauded and learnt from. Thank you.
Posted 4 Years Ago
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4 Years Ago
Thanks for reading. I don't think you ever get a final degree on affection.
Very cleverly crafted! Being a sucker for rhyme & rhythm, this one just bounced me along in pure delight! Some memorable lines, in particular:
"If you major in love
You must minor in stupid."
There's something about your sentence structure that just feels so right, a little bit of attitude & a little bit of playfulness! (((HUGS))) Fondly, Margie
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Thanks for reading. Yes, it is intentionally playful and irreverent.
A well rendered and highly enjoyed read, Delmar, with a flow and pace easy and smooth, if a bit run-on jumble with no spaces between verses. It is difficult to make Unmetered Quatrains flow, but you've done a masterful job of it.
To illustrate, I did this:
"It was not an affair
Of conversational flair.
Sundays? Spent nuzzling.
Not New York Times puzzling.
She adored me, she said,
For not reading in bed.
She’d tried men with minds,
But preferred me instead.
If she mentioned Fitzgerald
It wasn’t that fella,
But to have me get up
And switch on some Ella.
I pity the scholars
She’d tried and rejected.
Her mind they had courted
While the rest they neglected.
But please,
Don’t write me off
As an oaf or a fool;
I’ve read a few books,
And (I) have been to school.
This lesson I learned
About dealing with Cupid;
If you major in love
You must minor in stupid.
If your mind she despises;
Your body she’d seize,
Then sell all your books
And hide those degrees.
Put into one sentence
My premise is this:
It’s wise to be dumb
When the outcome is bliss."
And, it read sooo much better.
In (brackets), suggested omit.
I could not've been more entertained with your catchy imagery, as each verse had the wit of a Limerick.
Thanks for a very enjoyable read, Delmar … your ink metaphorically danced on the page.
Quite a gal … loved it! ⁓ Richard : )
PS
Here, from one of my students, mattavelli, is a piece I think you'll enjoy, as you both have a keenly original wit:
http://www.writerscafe.org/writing/mattavelli/1740264/
Posted 6 Years Ago
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6 Years Ago
Richard,
Thanks for reading and your suggested formatting makes a big improvement. You could.. read moreRichard,
Thanks for reading and your suggested formatting makes a big improvement. You could teach this stuff if so minded. (Smart Alec lives)
I will look up the work of your student, thanks.
I have always enjoyed light verse, limericks, nonsense poems and puns of all ages. I have no gift for rhyme so I appreciate it in others.
6 Years Ago
It's a distinct pleasure sharing with you, Delmar … I thank you! : )