Night Touch

Night Touch

Falling from her mother’s arms, the acorn
Reclines upon a mossy bed, and dreams
Dreams of bird’s nests in her hair.

Gently Earth impales herself upon an oaken stake
Then rests from her labor
In a pool of darkening shade.

Riven from the precipice, the far fallen flint
Is softly bathed by the stream, softly
Until sharp wrath is smoothed away.

As if in a dream
I feel your hand upon my brow
And as if dreaming, I sleep.

Author's Note

Any comments, suggestions or criticism welcome

Reviews

[Nusquam Esse]

Love the surreal feel on this one (since surrealism is my favourite type of literature); admittedly I have focused more on your stories than your poems, but this demonstrates that you are apt with both. I agree with Woody that the first stanza is by far the best, although they are all keepers! Only suggestion would be removing 'an' from in front of oaken stake, to try and cut its syllable count down a bit, since it feels awkward with the other lines.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks. So, back from the Seychelles? Got a tan?

[Nusquam Esse]

If I spent even a moment in the sun, I would wither away. No, I went to the north-east, to enjoy myself some rain... :D Somehow rain fits me better than a sunny beach.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

This read like a beautiful and gentle dream....to me, the second verse is immortal! Never read anything similar and it will stay with me.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for reading and your flattering comment.

[Dhara_Ditzy Kat]

Truly appreciated....😊... And you're most welcome.

[h d e rushin]

"You learn to recognize beauty by it's frame"

Clair Schwartz.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading. I will puzzle over the quote for another half hour then be distracted by something.

[Delmar Cooper]

PS Saw a video of Clair Schwartz. She is well framed.

[Kaylor Mason]

I really like the imagery. Nothing in the world is as good as a peaceful night's sleep.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for reading an for your gracious comment.

[Swetha]

nice poem...especially the last line.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading it and for your comment

[The Guiltless Dreamers]

Wow, this is amazing. We love it.

[V]

Such a dreamy write, words full of power. Good structure; the organizing of words is great in this one. I really enjoyed reading.

[Delmar Cooper]

I am glad you read it and your comment is very flattering. Thank you.

[Woody]

Now this is poetry Delmar. Unlike certain others, if you see what I mean. I really loved it. Each stanza has its own beauty. But the first is, to my mind, a beaut.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for your kind words. While there is no humor in thw poem there is no malice either. Most days I am content to settle for that much.

[Woody]

And you're doing great. Please continue and leave the clowning to me.

[Lyn Anderson]

This has a simple beauty, and a feel of comfort and longing at the same time. It is really deep.

[Chris]

Having reread several times as well ...the last stanza stays prominent even though the others generated pause and thought. Each is standalone and still shares the eve.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks, yes each one of thosefirst three fell into my notebook at different times.

[Chris]

I've loose journals all over the place...they breed in the light even! The avatar IS me... I do Ren fairs.

[Delmar Cooper]

Yes, I wondered about that picture.

[Chris]

always have a journal...near