Downstream

just words disguised as poetry

Downstream

 

Downstream from men

And from the camps of men

Downstream from the weighty clamor and clank of men

And the Great Insatiable Lust of men

A woman sings to her babe

And suckles him at her breast

And bathes him in the cool waters of the river

The cool waters of a river

Of diluted blood

Author's Note

any comment welcome

Reviews

[CD Campbell]

Dominance and lust is in our DNA. We deny it. Ignore it. Play at being the effeminate Dagwood, but its no use. Its what pushes us on to greater heights and it is our shame that everyone suffers because of it. I think this ones a keeper. I liked it.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thanks for reading and for your comment. Yeah, I like it also.

[Chris]

I imagine nearly every river on earth can lay an even claim to that descriptive depiction at one time or another of its existence. We are so efficient at killing each other and even ourselves regardless of the particular age.

On the other side of the imagery, bravery and "honor" are laudably and loudly touted in every schoolyard and classroom. Patriotism is a mindset. History and glory call for tomorrows, and who are we to argue as a species?

[Delmar Cooper]

I hope I am never called on to represent the species. Tough enough tending to myself. I've been fortunate to meet a few brave men and I've also met a few fools. The fools were fearless the brave men stopped shaking long enough to get the job done. I hope as a species we never run out of patriots and I hope every one of those patriots is a reluctant patriot.

I was kinda thinking about the legend of Achillies when I wrote that poem.

Cooper

[Chris]

I was thinking of Antietam and Shiloe and the Delta and Remagen and Stalingrad and Iraq's Tigris and on and on and on...

[Another Mayfly]

it's beautiful, i could happily read it again and again. quite simply its excellent.

[Delmar Cooper]

Thank you for your gracious and encouraging comment.

[Lyn Anderson]

I had this image of a third world country, and the strife going on all around her. A sharp and poignant piece.

[Sami Khalil]

One of your best writes on war. A very powerful one. I love how you worded with precision skills...:)...........................

[Delmar Cooper]

I am happy that you read it. Thanks for your gracious comment.

[Sami Khalil]

You are welcome graciously...:)......................