Bullet Train

Frustration with the lack of progress in life

Somewhere along the line I got confused and got on the wrong train.
I think I'm on the fast track to Nowhere.
Now if only I could find the courage to jump off
because I don't think we're making any more stops.

Of course, with no towns in sight, where do I go
after I watch the train leave me behind?
Do I die in the desert, or did I land in the ocean?
Treading water, wishing I was a fish.

I say that now, but if I reach dry land
I'll need legs to walk into the sunset,
And the ground wont be solid beneath my fish feet.
Water water everywhere, but not a drop to drink.

So maybe I'll drown, and pray for the cavalry to come.
To save me from the shadows I'm fighting
Cast by the light in my eyes, better shut them off
Curling up in the dark corners of my mind

Oh yeah, you can't save me from myself
The rhythm of the train soothes
Clack-clack, clack-clack, choochoo
On my way to Nowhere in the land of Mediocrity

Maybe it wont be so bad
My still life flashing before my eyes
Clack-clack, clack-clack
Shove me off this train

Wasted air, Wasted time
Wasted life, Wasted love
Wasted space, wasted effort
Clack-clack, clack-clack, choochoo

Passed every class, but still failing out of life
Look to my neighbor for answers, but they've turn in the test
Smiles on the faces, you know they're going far
Maybe if I smile too, the answers will come to me

Closing my eyes, victories are won in the mind
Clack-clack, clack-clack, clack-clack
Stay out of my head! The teacher's calling my name,
I stand naked before my classmates

Accept me as I am, clack-clack
But keep me at a distance, mediocrity
Is contagious like Avain Flu, I should stand alone
Birds of a feather flock together and all that.

Clack-clack, clack-clack, achoo
I'm sick of it all, sick of my mind
Sick in the head my parents knew
Sick of me, sick of what I do

Daddy I hate you, Daddy don't go
Mommy I love you, Mommy don't go
Cast me out into the lake, sink or swim
Look down the world is my reflection

Wasted air, Wasted time
Wasted life, Wasted love
Wasted space, wasted effort
Clack-clack, clack-clack, achoo

Jeer me on, it was all taken for granted
Daddy I need you, get away from me
Mommy you're done, it's time to grow up
Clack-clack, clack-clack, achoo

Oh dear, you caught it too, home grown stone hearts
Life lines cast by strangers with my face
Shake me quick, I'll be the death of you
Quarantined, before the callousness spreads

Padded walls, and pretty white rooms,
Segregation from the masses, I'm tied down
So I close my eyes to escape
Clack-clack, clack-clack, choochoo

I'm on the fast track to Nowhere
With the heart of a lion returned to Oz
clack-clack, clack-clack, clack-clack
Choochoo! Waiting to get off.

Author's Note

Go for it, whatever's on your mind

Photo Credit: Amphetamine Ashley from DeviantArt

Reviews

[Tex]

Well... This is REMARKABLE! I am stunned at how good this is. I am at a lose for words this is so good. This is the kind of write that could be studied in a poetry class on the deeper meanings and depths that can be entwined in poetry.

I loved this write!

100/100

[DeliriousCerises]

Well thank you very much. That's what I try to aim for with every piece I write, and the funny thing is, this was the one piece that I just wrote without that in mind.

[Tex]

well you nailed it... well done my friend.

[Buniheart]

This poem is certainly on a bullet train to the thoughts of my mind. I LOVE LOVE LOVED it! I especially love the imaginary you create with each sentence. They simply aren't words but a magnificent painting and i'd like to hang it. :)

[Kaya]

I will go out on a limb here, and say that this is the best poem i think i have ever read. I connected with it on so many levels... it gave words to emotions that had previously refused to be named. You are an incredible writer, what you're doing posting here and not being published somewhere is beyond me. Incredible.

[DeliriousCerises]

Wow, thank you! I think I still have a ways to go before I'm publishing material, I feel my great moments are far and few between, but I'm on my way to getting better, and things like this make me want to write more

[Becca Bishop]

WHAT????!!!! How is there only one review on this thing???? Well...now there's two, I guess...but I should count as fifteen since I'm super duper awesome, right? CONGRATULATIONS!!! YOU'VE GOT SIXTEEN REVIEWS!!!!
I loved this :D Obviously :P That's why it got first place. LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!!!! Fantastic job!!!

[DeliriousCerises]

I know this was like a week ago, but thank you. I am ecstatic to have 16 reviews on this piece because of you.

[Becca Bishop]

:) Well...you've got nineteen now :D :D :D :D So your scstaticicity (yes I just made up a word!!!!) or elasticity or domesticity or whatever should just have increased!!! YAY!!!!!!!!! Give yourself a big hug and then go look for my glasses because I lost them I: *sigh*

[CHRIS ANDES]

perhaps a great write for me
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