The Banshee's Howl

This a poem I wrote while in my creative writing class that I took my senior year. I don't know what genre this goes in so if anyone knows please let me know!

Darkness afoot, carrying me through the blinding light.

Nothing, nothing at all.

Death's scream, please pierce my heart.

All, or nothing at all.

Its indigent zest burrowing down inside me.

And the rotting of roses in my hands.

The sweet taste of acid gumdrops in my mouth.

And the blood seeping through and through.

Death's deep caress snatches my hand.

Walking me away, into Darkness.

Author's Note

Rating and constructive criticism is appreciated. I will rate and give constructive criticism to any who give it to me. Sort of a you scratch my back, I'll scratch yours.

Reviews

[SilentVerses]

Short but such bittersweet conceptions that wildly contrast the beating of a rhythmic concept. It holds a despair and dying flame that colours the world of your worlds in black and white, as colour seeps from the poem as everything dies in a deceit of what has been lost the simplistic elegance keeps it alive with the grace of a fallen heart. Stolen from the living you are turned to the blackness of a deadened land.

[Justsimplyjulia]

Whoa. Totally gave me the shivers. Short, cruel and I could almost taste the despair. Awesome metaphors! Keep up the great work....

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So thought provoking. I'm speechless on how to critique this. "All, or nothing at all." -That may seem a simple line considering the heaviness of the other words, but that's the line that speaks to me. Like, give me pleasure or pain, but make it worth it.

[Ruth]

Claustrophobically vivid hon!
You manipulate darkness really well...this is blindingly suffocating! lol
Full circle, powerful and I like it a lot....the title is intriguing....the Banshee is enough to make skin crawl :)
Excellent work xx

[Emily Rae]

i love the imagery in this piece. you made death sound very seductive.

[Lily Mae]

I wrote a piece on the Banshee it was allot of fun..... I love your write..it's dark and mysterious...perfect..xx

[Sujash I. Purna]

This is a very thought-provoking poem! I'm wondering if this Banshee comes from Irish stories...I've heard this is an attic-apparition? Or worse? But yours banshee is symbolic, I liked the idea related to it you've depicted here! Kudos!

[Legacy]

DelicateSymphony,

As writers we learn our own special technique... if it works for us, it works and we utilize it.

Your poem is dark and invasive, with blood and fear comes a dark writing in all who sucomb to it, indeed it works.

My favorite line is this:

Darkness afoot, carrying me through the blinding light.

and this:

Death's scream, please pierce my heart.

I couldn't choose between the two so I went with both.

Darkness carrying us through the blinding light? A piercing scream of death! Amazing...

You are good at this type of dark, you should stay in your comfort zone *at least until the light carrys you through the dark*.

Have a wonderful day,

Legacy