siren love song of the broken

just a cool little peice i put together, make of it what you will:)

Blood is red.

Your veins are blue.

Bloody stained glass dresses

Obscure my view.

As I shop along the river Lethe,

As demons now barter goods,

Wrinkled morals, slightly used and shopworn salvation,

This is my American nation.

A place where angels fear to tread

With sin’s shadows blinding you

And crimson haloes gracing your head.

Bias is red.

Sadness is blue.

And you’re all clueless

About what they do to you.

 

Reviews

[Mistaken]

Awesome rhyme scheme kinda wordy but good lol :) i like it and very good imagery thanks for putting it in my contest

[Fanciful Goddess]

AMAZING!!!! VERY IMAGINATIVE!!!!!!! Its like" roses are red violets are blue" LOVE IT!!!

[We are young.]

This was spine chilling, I could picture everything in my head, you put the mental picture in my head with such exstrodinary words.

[Mercury Mirrors]

I applaud this work it's the best I've seen in a long time.
VERY VERY good rhyming scheme.
VERY VERY VERY good flow.
Amazing imagigary.
You put on a great show of mental images.
5 stars.

MMFCL,
Malizzious.

[Miss Prince]

Have you ever read The Goblin's Market? Because this is like the shortened version of that poem. Do it. Because this is awesome.