Grave words

Think about, you'll get it eventually

Grave words

 

Just because you self destruct like a virus

And your coldness, Cannot encompass

My heart, of me don’t be jealous

My peace is this, my private necropolis

 

They say that good intentions pave

The way to hell, and that love will save

Us, but I just see it trying to enslave

Us and dragging me straight to the grave

 

You may have gotten me in the ballroom

Hiding in your human costume

 Wrapped up in the shadows and gloom

 But don’t think to presume, That I’ll go alone to my tomb

 

I won’t into a body bag be zipped

 Because I refuse to follow god’s script

From whose book a page you ripped

I’ll take you m***********s with me to my crypt

 

Hell is just a summer camp for angels

And heaven one for devils

 To take a break from purgatory

And mess with our minds

 Heaven can’t be found in your needles

And hell’s got a hold on your vitals

Just stop it all and say you’re sorry

And leave this present-past behind

 

Don’t think to presume, that I’ll go alone to my tomb

I’ll take you m***********s with me to my crypt

So don’t disturb my peace in my private necropolis

Or I’ll let love with is claws drag us right to the grave

And then nothing will save

Us from our doom

Your wings will be clipped

And we’ll both end up completely.

Lifeless

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

 

Reviews

[Beautifully_Anarchist]

God i love this one well done seriously great, emotive, striking piece of work!

[October]

I had to comment this one.
The words are so powerful.
It just doesn't flow well.

I agree that the rhyming is off a little.
Just a tiny bit of revising and this could be
a really great poem.

I really like it, though,
At any rate.

Thanks for sharing.

[Lexy]

I'm going to complain on one thing: the rhyming. Whether it was accidental or not (The first stanza suggests that it was not), you should try to keep up the same rhyme throughout, though I know how hard it is. If you rhyme, you should keep it steady. And it's not as hard to get as you suggest by your description.