The shadows

Shades and shadows fill the sky. Silence becomes so loud that all life burns from within the soul waiting to be born again. It blazes as the fire uproars into the heart. Bones disengrate... breaks away. Upward it continues to travel destroying everything within its manifest... and destiny it is. There remains no true way to stop the death, the homocide... suicide. Self destruction, the worst of all; however, death of one's self before the death themslef. Aha, confused? Give it some time. What is it to be you? A question, an idea so often taken for granted. Something expected to be so, could be lost forever. Damned to an uknown land. Mist crawls up the walls. Demons surrounding. Darkness to which one cannot see, but feel the the things of the darkness of the black that are dark, darker than the eye sees. It is stuck, and here is where it shall reside for all of eternity to be tortured. It is lost. Completely oblvious to what is going on outside..

 

What is outside?

Where is here?

What?...

Who am I, I'm not me.

   Not anymore

Reviews

[modtoddinc]

I like what you have written here. My thoughts are with editing... less is often more... so though I like some of your descriptions I feel you could capture the setting with less description all at once... I think you could take this paragraph and spread it's descriptive qualities throughout the chapter adding more dialogue and action to create an effective and balanced read... just my two cents worth... I am no expert. =) Keep writing! (feel free to critique my posts as well, feedback is how we all improve.)

[Carly]

I actually like the descriptions. I don't think you would want a whole novel that is this intense with description, but I really enjoyed them here. It definitely made me think.

[Dejene]

Thank you very much!

[Dejene]

Please comment and tell me what you think. It would much appreciated.