Picture Your Unhappy Place

Close your eyes,

breathe in,

picture your unhappy place.

Feel that wave of sadness,

the impending madness

followed by exhaustion.

Distortion.

Contorted faces,

in all the dark places.

Picture your unhappy place.

The scarlet little ribbons,

the beatings that's given,

the lying,

the crying,

the good people dying.

The pain,

those left are no longer sane,

nothing more to gain,

just a lot... lot... more rain.

picture your unhappy place.

Blood and gore,

what are you fighting for?

Picture your unhappy place.

Broken glass on the floor,

people slamming the door.

Picture your unhappy place.

You're out of time,

but THAT'S not your crime.

Picture your unhappy place,

breathe out,

open your eyes.

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

i just love this ,so emotional..
The scarlet little ribbons,
the beatings that's given,
the lying,
the crying,
the good people dying.
The pain,
those left are no longer sane,
nothing more to gain,
just a lot... lot... more rain.
picture your unhappy place
lovely write

[DeirdreInShadows]

so very glad that you enjoyed that part!! :D

[bluessadmood]

you are so welcome.

[Jordan]

Interesting. Saying to picture your 'unhappy' place seems like try-harding. If you had've said picture your 'happy' place then it would've come across as a more genuine expression of feeling in a hectic life.

I must be the pickiest person in the world for TWO LETTERS to change how I feel about a poem. My apologies if I'm the person who put salt in the sugar jar.

[Cherry Pepperweb]

A very moving piece. I think we have to visit that place every so often to truly understand where we need to go and appreciate the 'happy place' when we get there.

[DeirdreInShadows]

Definitely, i agree. it was a little contradictory to the whole "picture your happy place"

[Urja Gokani]

amazingly written keep it up

[DeirdreInShadows]

thank you so very much! :D

[ANTO]

This is really inventive and unique - the way you turned the meditation trope right on its head is so unique. A well written piece Deirdre.

[DeirdreInShadows]

thank you so very much!

[Ellay]

Truly a masterpiece :) loved it

[Bare trees]

Like a meditation that inhales all the bad stuff in and purges it out of your system with the exhale. Nice.