One Word To Define

Maybe if you turned around me; And aimed at the back of my head...

Be afraid and be aware
But so you come back to me at last
I can see your intentions in your hand
Flying right through the dark skies

Hold me back and hold me tight
Because you will not see me fight
You know all you have to do
Aim the gun to my head and...

Walking over bodies
Today you get to know what real pain is
One word to define "Hate"
One word and I'll be done
So pull the trigger
And I'm gone

Shatter, shatter, shatter me
Leave aside sanity and enjoy it
A second, a minute, a moment
Is a life while swimming in the red of it and...

Walking over bodies
Today you get to know what real pain is
One word to define "Hate"
One word and I'll be done
So pull the trigger
And I'm gone

All the things you said to me
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill
All the things I said to you,
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill

All the things I said to you
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill
All the things I said to you
And all the loath I wasted in you

Walking over bodies
Today you get to know what real pain is
One word to define "Hate"
One word and I'll be done
So pull the trigger
And I'm gone

One word to define "Hate"
And I'm done
One word to define "Hate"
And I'm done

I'll lay down forever
With your words
I'll hate you forever
After you pull that trigger
And I'm gone

 

Author's Note

I know it rather sounds like I was trying to say "One word to define 'Hatred'", but no, it's "Hate" and not "Hatred"

Reviews

[kera moondust]

I am no good at reveiwing things, but I liked this poem, it looks like you have a couple of typo's, like in the first line of the poem I think you meant to write, 'Be afraid and be aware' but other than having a few mistakes with typo's it looks good, you might want to look it over to fix typo's though. ^^ I liked this poem very much.

[Ian]

Wow. This is really good it really enjoyed it! =)
This poem expresses so well your feelings...
Though I would like you to be the one that holds the gun,
I would like you to be the one to pull the trigger... Wow that sounds good =)...
...Erm...
What was I saying?
I like this writing but I would like it more if you have been more agressive...
I think you didn't explode your anger at its highest point, as you have done in other writings...
But it's ok. I mean is really good. Don't feel bad about it is just my opinion...
My favorite lines were:


"All the things you said to me
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill
All the things I said to you,
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill

All the things I said to you
Were meant to kill, were meant to kill
All the things I said to you
And all the loath I wasted in you"

Those lines hold the anger I would like to hear more.
Anyway, Wonderful write!

[XThe_happy_emoX]

Wow..thats pretty deep...very well put and..you know?? it reminds me of a my chemical romance song..i dont know why..lol prolly because it mentions dead bodies and stuff..i really loved it, keep it up man!!! KEEP THAT PEN MOVING! (and those ideas flowing ;) loll....very good work..d(///_^)b

[kera moondust]

I am no good at reveiwing things, but I liked this poem, it looks like you have a couple of typo's, like in the first line of the poem I think you meant to write, 'Be afraid and be aware' but other than having a few mistakes with typo's it looks good, you might want to look it over to fix typo's though. ^^ I liked this poem very much.