Hi, Deeps!
Welcome to the WritersCafe … I hope you will enjoy it here and make many new friends.
It is my pleasure to read (for the first time) one of your posts.
The wisdom and advice you have shared in this composition is wonderful to behold, and very well written, except for the lack of punctuation and in beginning each line with a capital. To me, it reads more like a matter-of-fact list of motivational comments, with scant poetic voice, than a Free Verse poem, but it does move one's mind to think of life and opportunity. I hope this might offer you constructive thought to help improve your work.
In-any-event, I have very much enjoyed my first reading of your generous offerings, and look forward to many more … brightest blessings to you! ⁓ Richard
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you sir for your valuable advice.
9 Years Ago
I always try my best for my fine poet friends … you are most welcome, Deeps. : )
Hi, Deeps!
Welcome to the WritersCafe … I hope you will enjoy it here and make many new friends.
It is my pleasure to read (for the first time) one of your posts.
The wisdom and advice you have shared in this composition is wonderful to behold, and very well written, except for the lack of punctuation and in beginning each line with a capital. To me, it reads more like a matter-of-fact list of motivational comments, with scant poetic voice, than a Free Verse poem, but it does move one's mind to think of life and opportunity. I hope this might offer you constructive thought to help improve your work.
In-any-event, I have very much enjoyed my first reading of your generous offerings, and look forward to many more … brightest blessings to you! ⁓ Richard
Posted 9 Years Ago
1 of 1 people found this review constructive.
9 Years Ago
Thank you sir for your valuable advice.
9 Years Ago
I always try my best for my fine poet friends … you are most welcome, Deeps. : )