Pass Me By

Peeping Tom

Sometimes the role of "spectator"
(unpublished writer, human investigator)
bores me.

I try my damnedest to appear
genuinely interested to provoke
raw emotions from the average person's,
the poet's, mouth.

It's all for later evaluation
to try to form conclusions,
 better understandings, of why
people do the things they do.

I seem to forget the
"do" aspect.
To actually accomplish anything
is a feat meant for the bold.

The ambitious have left me
to wallow in my petty questions.
I have no choice but to blame myself-
to loathe and to love my position;

my self-appointed existence.

Author's Note

I know that this website is more of a social network for "writers" than it is for people that wish for criticism. Seems more folks wish to only review things of those that have reviewed them. If this sparks your interest, if this catches your attention: tarnish it, befoul it, or leave words that spark improvement. I'm not here to be your friend, I'm here to ramble in the most reasonable and logical way I can.

Reviews

[child-of-promise]

So, I've read through several of your poems, and I've noticed that your style is a stream of consciousness kind of thingy, I guess. There's probably a more eloquent way to say that, but what I am saying is that I enjoy it. I like the honesty in your writing, the nihilism, the cynicism, blah blah.
Notable line: "To actually accomplish anything
is a feat meant for the bold."
yes, yes.
having said that, there is a kind of crudeness to your format. how do I explain this? (who am I to say this? I'm not a master of the art!)
there is a difference between ranting or writing a dissertation or renouncing the world and actually creating something worth saying and saying it well.
I encourage you, poet, to march forth! study other styles, study the Greats like Eliot and Dickens and those other geniuses. your thought process is there, in that you have something more to say than "love me, love me, oh, why can't you love me?" or "the agony, the agony, end it all."
the great thing about poetry is that we can somehow find answers in it from the questions we used to write it.

you don't have to read this whole review; it's basically useless...

[J.T. Decker]

Thank you for your honesty and for reading my work. I assure you, I do study the greats. Haha. I'm in college to do that very thing. I don't even consider most of what I write as poetry. It's like you said, it's just a stream of consciousness kind of thing. I occasionally give my words form and structure, but I like the chaotic and unpredictable nature (the crudeness) that I give my writings; the unpredictability of it. I strive to create in a different way from the vast majority of others. Hell, though, to each his or her own. Thanks again for the review.

[child-of-promise]

Sure thing! Anything else you want me to read or critique, let me know!

[J.T. Decker]

Feel free to say anything you wish about any of my writings. I'll be sure to return the favor.