My Self Harm

Author's Note

Feedback much appreciated

Reviews

[Wintershade]

I found it to be very well constructed and written well. It is a deeply emotional piece, and I enjoyed it. You have a real flair for poetry, I think.
My one suggestion would be to give up the artistic template to write on. While the poem looks very dramatic on the black paper with the crimson highlights in the background, it makes this EXTREMELY difficult to read. You can put up an image with the poem, without printing the poem on the image...just so people can more easily enjoy your incredible work. Just an observation.
I look forward to reading more from you in the future. And please, feel free to check my work out too.

[Red3Bravo]

I feel like this could really benefit from more use of imagery. I stead of telling us that there was a transition from beauty to shame, show us. Where are the scars and cuts, the unhealed wounds that force others to turn away? what do they look like, and how are you different from before. Also, I can't tell if you are being vague or private at some parts. This feels like it was written to someone rather than for the public. Clearly very heartfelt and sincere, but I think you could benefit from some distance so that you can paint us a clearer picture of the dynamics of this relationship.