The View

On my patio.

The View

The view is so serene and soothing.
My companion as each days ending.

Its beauty is a never-ending living art.
The perfect way for each day to start.

With no way of knowing the joy you bring.
The sight of you just makes my heart sing.

My soul seems to soar in my lonely heart.
A beautiful view is a timeless piece of living art...

© 2007 Debra Stevens Edwards (Debby)

Reviews

[Larissa G.]

Well, it is pretty. It's also, no offense, written with some common themes and ideas. I like it, don't get me wrong, but I would like it even more without the lines that most of us think of when we see a view. I like uncommon ideas that I wish I had thought of.
I hope I haven't offended you with this...

[Deborah Leah Krempa]

A very pretty poem. Thank you for sharing. Debileah

[Melissa Kliemann]

I like the simplicity of this piece. I like that it's short, just a glimpse of this view. However, what if you did a version without the rhymes? The rhythm is a little bit off, and I think that only ends up distracting from your purpose. Other than that, I really enjoyed this poem. I love pieces that capture the little moments of life, and you did a great job at that.

P.S.--I'm sorry about taking so long with the Summer Stories contest. I just moved and I haven't got the chance yet to read/review stories. I hope to be done sometime soon, though.

[Krystal Waters]

I felt I was reading part of a poem. I guess I was looking for the description of where you were... what you were looking at and why so nice? I did get the over view in my own mind of what I would call the "perfect view". Maybe that is what you were going for? Rhyme was well done!

Krystal

[L. L. Jacobson]

I love this piece for so many reasons: the way you approached the beauty of nature; you did it in such a serene way, where one must tip-toe to not scare off the small creatures awaiting on the sides of those mountains along such paths as a windy road to pull over to an overlook on a Sunday drive, and to stand and inhale new eyes with such a view. There is nothing like solitude within oneself, in harmony with nature.

[Kayelyse]

I really enjoyed this poem. The lines flow together and makes me think.

[Bubo]

A beautiful view is a timeless piece of living art...


so beautiful and contenting.............

[Snickerdoodle!!!]

i agree with you about a beautiful view being a timeless piece of living art..this is soo true..ahah the imagery makes this poem come to life..great!
-adreanna

[Luis Gabriel]

ou i like it lol. its very nice. umm only one small thing though:

The sight of you just makes my heart sing.
My soul seems to soar in my lonely heart.

umm well its a bit of a contradiction, i hope im not being rude its totally your piece. it just seems that in the first line the heart is happy and the second line the heart changes to lonely.

alll in all though its an excellent poem madame.

peace

-luis

[L.P. Hawkins]

I totally thought this was going to be a poem about the talkshow! ;) I completely agre with you about a good view. This is a lovely, sentimental poem depicting everything that's wholesomely good about one's surroundings...and I know just how you feel--take a look at the pics of the beachhouse view I had this last weekend.