~ Heavily Veiled~

Life love hope dreams
Friends lovers passion
streams like a steam liner
bulldozing through me

The waves that seem to
come all so frequently
crashing into my life
my thoughts my soul

Never giving a chance
to swim above it always
floating just on the top
enough to breath in rushed
fast paced sprints

Dieing day by day
hour by hour
minute by minute
take me out of this race

Sun filled days run into
pitch black nights
never feeling the difference
in this cloud filled haze

The darkness comforts me
hides the flaws my face
my pain encased like a
cocoon of wrath made
just for me

I SHOULD HAVE KNOWN BETTER

No longer climbing but scaling
these walls nails replaced by
claws leaving imprints in the cement
of this concrete jungle

Dream big they say find you way
they say.... " You Dream Big" !!!
I'm tired of the lies shrouded
in conceptions of long ago truths

Heavy... too Heavy
This veil is too thick
and my eyes are tired

By Debbie Mills Kelly

Reviews

[Tate Morgan]

Could this be about the dream that you can have it all.Gloria steinmen told us you could.however life doesnt work like that giving up a career to have children for instance .We all make choices that forever alter our destinies.With them come thew consequences of our actions

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Tate.... no... its was about a few things... one was a relationships that was shrouded in lies and the other about the consent pain im in everyday from my spinal cord injury.... I mean it took a while and I do walk good and all now but it took a while and it took allot of things away from me... I have 3 beautiful , healthy and wonderful kids... all grown now... but they are my heart and joy and now writing,,,,, I do however have a few pieces about dreams ;) Thanks again for reading !!! Means allot

[Tate Morgan]

you are welcome Ill get to the others

[Debbie_Philly]

:) Thank you !!!

[Peter H]

hmmmmmmmm , i understand life can hit hard but we need to always keep going :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Agreed Peter :) thanks for reading !!

[KAin]

I think a lot of people would agree - many aspiring novelists on Writerscafe probably hoping their book is the next great *insert your genre here* novel (fantasy for me) will look at the words "Dream big" and nod. And a lot of them will look at your final lines and think, 'yeah, I'm tired, too.' Tired of waiting, tired of thinking and wishing.
Obviously this isn't just one theme - there are a lot if images swirling about in the whirlpool of this poem, some of them more visible than others. As I write this, I haven't checked out the other reviews yet, so I don't know if you've answered this - but I saw this as a poem about pain, deception, and about hopes verging on despair... and about how it can weigh down on the human spirit.

Strong work! Keep it up.

[Debbie_Philly]

Landred, Thank you very much ... it is about pain in so many ways... and whatever the poet gets from it is a lift for me. I'm so happy to meet you and i will be over to read you as well.. I just hand surgery on my hand .. I'm not supposed to use it.. but its hard not here at the Cafe..lol thank you again your word are VERY inspiring :)

[KAin]

You're welcome...
Don't strain yourself! Hope it feels 100% soon!

[Muse]

Wow..know your pain...more than you know.

Heavy... too Heavy
This veil is too thick
and my eyes are tired

I'm tired too. xo and ((hugs))

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Muse.... yes... sometimes it gets too heavy for sure... My muse at the time pissed me off... but I sure got allot of poetry out of it...lol. THank you again !!! :)

[EileenMarie]

Amazing write! I too am stuck on the "dreams" and "truths" to life. Your poem is real and so many people or philosophies seem so fake to me lately. I really enjoyed this one.

[Debbie_Philly]

Than k you so much Eileen !!! :) It means allot... On my way to read you !! :)

[Michael X]

I love how the rhythm consumes the reader with feeling of passion, desire
and artistic insight that enlivens the flow and vividness of the meaning.
excellent job, I really enjoyed the abstract details that are captivating

[Debbie_Philly]

Michael Im am so happy that you got this and enjoyed it.... and very grateful for your comment and your time to read me.... thank you again !!! :)

[Sujash I. Purna]

Thought provoking. You took a different angle(and I'm pretty sure a little tinged with pessimism) to look at life. Like good old Bob Dylan said,

"How many roads must a man walk down
Before you call him a man?
How many seas must a white dove sail
Before she sleeps in the sand?"

Some say life is just a collection of mirage and illusions. I really loved this poem of yours in here and it really stirred up the whirlpool of thoughts in my mind. The veil is too heavy to see through and understand what life really holds out for you.

Kudos!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Sujash... I so much appreciate it.... Some of my pieces have hope..lol. but this is how I felt in that moment and in my life... keeping my head above water is an everyday event... thank you again so much for reading me... it means allot !! :)

[Debbie_Philly]

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