Restoring Waters

Inspiring piece about not giving up , and not letting other bring you down.

 

RESTORING WATERS

 

The ripple effects of the calm tempted water relaxes me

Soothes my soul till my inner being is illuminated with

brilliance , restoring me to life.

Reassuring waters wash over me lifting my indiscretions

I start to feel my inner strength flourish leading me from

hibernation.

Sparkling liquid pools of rejuvenation immerse my essence

down into it’s depth of blue limpid protection so that I

may emerge  unpretentious yet proud of who I’ve become.

Once filled with self doubt like an irrelevant child looking

for validation.

I’ve been emancipated into real womanhood, relevant  in every

way possible . Come bath here, all who doubt their worth

Drink of its enlightenment until you too transform and

resurface kicking to the top of life once more.

 

By: Debbie Kelly     

 

 

Reviews

[The Scanners See Sound]

Firstly, I have to say that I went into this piece rather biased, after reading the description of it. Hopeful, positively motivational flim flam tends to make me queesy.

But regardless of my opinion of the subject matter, the piece was very well executed. Subtle, yet poignant use of language, without any overt sense of arrogance. Very calming imagery, somewhat like an extended haiku of sorts.

My only negative criticism was the conclusion. I understand the concept of sharing a sense of hope and all that stuff, but the conclusion, while good in it's own right, I think could have been more abstract. I suppose that's just a personal preference thing, though.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much :) What a wonderful review and I understand your point about the end..... I sometimes get wrap up in the whole hope thing...lol. I will take that point ... thank you again :)

[Michael X]

insight and experience combine to draw conclusion to the mystery
that is renewal, beautiful, peaceful, the wording is a lulling whisper

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Michael.... it was a much needed peace at the time :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Scanner.... I very much appreciate your review... I'm sorry i didnt respond earlier... I have been away from this site for a very long time.... Your review means allot !! Thanks again

[Ladysue]

I thought the poem was indeed poignant and I loved the inspirational factor. Very well written and a pleasure to read!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Lady.... I know its been a few years since I have been on... thank you for the kind review !! :)

[Creepy Swine Guy]

I love the subject matter and I love how you have put this poem together. I see a few things that I would modify, but none of it disorienting enough to subtract from my enjoyment of this poem. I will drop those things in a PM and send them to you.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Guy !!! I know its been a while.. but thank you very much!!