AUTUMN"S PEN

This was a callab with my friend and mentor Poeticpiers ( Ivor) Thank you Ivor

 

Autumn’s  Pen

 

Autumn leaves blow swiftly past me,
like memories from yesterday.
Twirling colors fill me with glee
as leaves like naughty children play.
Falling from trees so carelessly
they carry on their merry way.
Life starts to feel so worry free
and all my troubles fade away
Autumns rainbows are all I see,
the skies above no longer gray.
My happiness is here to stay
Emotions run through my mind
now I can leave the past behind.

 

By; Debbie Kelly and Ivor ( Poeticpiers)

Author's Note

Ivor and I did this a long time ago when he was first teaching me of form and poetry.

Reviews

[Trée]

Debbie, your wielding of metaphor, leaves as naughty children, as memories blown past, is very powerfully and evocatively executed. I love the uplifting tone, especially after reading your poem on aging. ;-)

When writing takes me out of the past and future, and posits me in the eternal now; when writing begs to be read again, not to understand but to swim in the joy of another's soul, not to comprehend, but to be, then that is very good writing indeed. You do that here.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Tree for you wonderful comments.... this was a collab with a wonderful and talented English Scholar who was helping me when I first started writing... :) Thank you so much for reading me as always !!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much everyone for your reviews !!!

[Siddartha Beth Pierce]

Lovely imagery of the leaves like children at play. The cadence in this work is delightful as are the words. Thank you for sharing your immense talent.
Light,
Siddartha

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much Hun... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !!

[Silent Kim aka mizmetap..]

Very nice work, great flow and your choice of words are wonderfully choosen.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !! He was such an amazing man !! :)

[emz]

Wow this is truly wonderful... the imagery is perfection.. i enjoyed this immensely

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much ... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !! He was a great teacher of Form !! :)

[ShadowWolf]

"Leave the past behind"...how perfect!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much Hun... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !! He was an amazing and talented man,,, thank you again for reading and commenting !!

[Ms Jessica Renee]

The vividness of your words bring about a power to this poem.
Exquisite work my dear.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much Hun... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !!

[WordMaster]

A wonderfully penned poem, full of colorful images

The last sentence does a wonderful job of pulling the entire poem together

Exceptional work!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so Much Hun... this was a Collab.... when I first started writing !! He was an amazing poet and he loved his form poetry !! :)