There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes s.. read moreThank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes still feel :)
There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.
Posted 10 Years Ago
2 of 2 people found this review constructive.
10 Years Ago
Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes s.. read moreThank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes still feel :)
I understand this very well Deb. We all get stuck in moments its just a part of life.
but we can get out of it
for they won't last. It's just another moment. This time it will pass. omg you know how much I love that song & U2?? lol I was thinking of you and do hope all is well with you these days. I have to give you my number so we can meet up one day if you feel up to it:))) xox love you ...
Sounds really good Maria would love to meet up.... yes I have been going through allot lately.... th.. read moreSounds really good Maria would love to meet up.... yes I have been going through allot lately.... thats usually when my muse comes out to play...lol ;) Thank you so much again !!
10 Years Ago
lol hello!! your welcome!! ok maybe when the weather gets a little warmer will do something:) I'll .. read morelol hello!! your welcome!! ok maybe when the weather gets a little warmer will do something:) I'll inbx you my # on fb
LOL Baby...... thats perfectly of.... sometimes it makes sense and sometimes it doesn't.... it was s.. read moreLOL Baby...... thats perfectly of.... sometimes it makes sense and sometimes it doesn't.... it was something I was feeling when I wrote it... thank you for reading :)
Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions
Buried deep within -----
tremendous line. An throttled state of emotion beautifully penned .Loved it :)
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much Anand for reading :) I will be over to your page !!
This really captures poetic interiority for me. the lack of punctuation and almost fervently questioning tone are testament to this and it's all framed by hands pressed on glass, inferring a trapped observer of the world around them. (at least to me, maybe i've brought to many shovels to this scene.) The only thing that irks me is the capitalization of not, I understand the emphatic implication but feel as though it could be constructed in a more smoothed visual sense.
Thank you very much Thomas.... your right on all counts here.... and yes I was in a fever of sorts w.. read moreThank you very much Thomas.... your right on all counts here.... and yes I was in a fever of sorts when writing it.... you can never bring too many shovels....lol and I appreciate it :). The capital.... I may change that... I was trying to make a point but maybe its not needed in that way... thank you again for reading :)
10 Years Ago
Of course, thanks for sharing. The only reason I bring it up is because I've had plenty of polite sc.. read moreOf course, thanks for sharing. The only reason I bring it up is because I've had plenty of polite scoldings from professors before for that.
10 Years Ago
Oh I take no offence at all I really do appreciate it :)
We hide amidst those secrets and scar'd views that life imposes upon our psyche, and sometimes even time doesn't heal those wounds. Well said Debbie, nice to see you back. ;-)
Posted 10 Years Ago
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10 Years Ago
Thank you so much Frieda.... and yes like I told Cowboy.... Ive been stuck in a moment.... and Im s.. read moreThank you so much Frieda.... and yes like I told Cowboy.... Ive been stuck in a moment.... and Im sure I will be again... its just how it is... Thank you again so much !!! Its good to see you !! :)
10 Years Ago
Was my pleasure Debbie, hope you stick around! :-)
Hello everyone,
My name is Debbie , I have been writing for about 13 years now, I'm 51 years old and live in Philly. I used to have a show on Blog talk Radio called REVERSE with Michael Quigg every o.. more..