HIDDEN

HIDDEN

A Poem by Debbie_Philly

Hidden


Dead hands pressed numb cold against glass without a view

Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions

Buried deep within… bring the shovel if it will help, not

this time these answers are too far hidden.

Time won’t tell time does not heal scars that show no profit.

Let me out desperately banging on walls that were built by

someone that person was not me.


By : Debbie Mills Kelly ( Debbie Philly)

3/24/2014

© 2014 Debbie_Philly


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There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes s.. read more



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one day, we will see clearly, i believe it is written somewhere :)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Emily !!! :)
There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.

Posted 10 Years Ago


2 of 2 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes s.. read more
I understand this very well Deb. We all get stuck in moments its just a part of life.
but we can get out of it
for they won't last. It's just another moment. This time it will pass. omg you know how much I love that song & U2?? lol I was thinking of you and do hope all is well with you these days. I have to give you my number so we can meet up one day if you feel up to it:))) xox love you ...

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Sounds really good Maria would love to meet up.... yes I have been going through allot lately.... th.. read more
maria  ( rose)

10 Years Ago

lol hello!! your welcome!! ok maybe when the weather gets a little warmer will do something:) I'll .. read more
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Sounds great !! :)
This makes no sense to me but what do I know

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

LOL Baby...... thats perfectly of.... sometimes it makes sense and sometimes it doesn't.... it was s.. read more
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Opps I meant Ok... not of...lol
Reading this brings a feeling of desperation, frustration at those useless scars... An intense and thoughtful piece, Debbie.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

All of those things are what I felt as I wrote it .... thank you Rita... ;)
Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions

Buried deep within -----

tremendous line. An throttled state of emotion beautifully penned .Loved it :)
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Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much Anand for reading :) I will be over to your page !!
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ANM
Like this it is full of strong meaning! Words make poems not punctuation or form! Well written Debbie,

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you so much my friend... xo :)
ANM

10 Years Ago

You are very welcome!
Too very, very real... in a world that doesn't look back - nor forward to each selfless hell left inside.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you Chris !! Means allot that you understand and read and Liked :) xo
Chris

10 Years Ago

I find you always have thoughts I listen intent to...
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Awww your the best Chris !! :)
This really captures poetic interiority for me. the lack of punctuation and almost fervently questioning tone are testament to this and it's all framed by hands pressed on glass, inferring a trapped observer of the world around them. (at least to me, maybe i've brought to many shovels to this scene.) The only thing that irks me is the capitalization of not, I understand the emphatic implication but feel as though it could be constructed in a more smoothed visual sense.

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you very much Thomas.... your right on all counts here.... and yes I was in a fever of sorts w.. read more
Thomas Skahill

10 Years Ago

Of course, thanks for sharing. The only reason I bring it up is because I've had plenty of polite sc.. read more
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Oh I take no offence at all I really do appreciate it :)
We hide amidst those secrets and scar'd views that life imposes upon our psyche, and sometimes even time doesn't heal those wounds. Well said Debbie, nice to see you back. ;-)

Posted 10 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

Thank you I will.... just need to get out of this funk !!! :)
Frieda P

10 Years Ago

No pressure, just hurry it the fook up will ya? hah ;-)
Debbie_Philly

10 Years Ago

LOL Im trying.... xoxox

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Hello everyone, My name is Debbie , I have been writing for about 13 years now, I'm 51 years old and live in Philly. I used to have a show on Blog talk Radio called REVERSE with Michael Quigg every o.. more..

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