HIDDEN

Hidden

Dead hands pressed numb cold against glass without a view

Nowhere to run mind on fire no answers to the questions

Buried deep within… bring the shovel if it will help, not

this time these answers are too far hidden.

Time won’t tell time does not heal scars that show no profit.

Let me out desperately banging on walls that were built by

someone that person was not me.

By : Debbie Mills Kelly ( Debbie Philly)

3/24/2014

Author's Note

Reviews

[KAin]

There was a frantic feeling in this poem - the lack of punctuation made it feel breathless and desperate. Curiously, I found the lack of punctuation make me emphasize the poem in different places on the reread. It's strange how the meaning changes when you alter the inflections in your own mind.
There's a sense of being lost in your own darkness, and even if the light managed to get through, it would be a splintered thing.
Well-written Debbie. Keep it up.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so so much Landred.... I really appreciate it ... and yes thats how I felt and sometimes still feel :)

[...]

I certainly hope the walls are crumbling for you now. The only way I can get rid of depression is to let go. If you can...let go.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you... and Im sorry it took so long to reply... I have been out of commission

[TL Boehm]

We find ourselves in prisons when on the outside it appears we are unfettered. I know that place well. A powerful write.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much TL :) Yes it can be a powerful and lonely place .. sorry you know it as well :(

[Daydreamer]

Oh My God!! This is extraordinary! You depicted the state so well! And the image and font were a good choice too! Which font is this btw?
Keep it up ♥

[Debbie_Philly]

Wow Manal thank you very much thats very kind of you !!! Im not sure about the font... just normal I did it on my Word and then copied it but didn't pay attention to the font I used...lol Sometimes it comes out different on here... I copy and paste from my Word all the time instead of writing directly on here :) Thank you again so much for reading !!

[Debbie_Philly]

Wow Manal thank you very much thats very kind of you !!! Im not sure about the font... just normal I did it on my Word and then copied it but didn't pay attention to the font I used...lol Sometimes it comes out different on here... I copy and paste from my Word all the time instead of writing directly on here :) Thank you again so much for reading !!

[Vitasta Ganjoo]

i so felt it! lovely!! keep it up.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Visista Very much appreciate the eview... so sorry I took so long to reply... :)

[Vitasta Ganjoo]

its vitasta :) yeah anytime.

[Debbie_Philly]

Opps sorry Hun !!!

[Ladysue]

I think we all experience this kind of frustration at one time or another. You captured it really well. nicely done..

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Sue and Im sorry it took so long to reply... I have been sick. Thank you again so much I will be by to see you as well !! :)

[Pax Analog]

A boxed poem of frustration everyone can relate to. Striking accompanying image. And a note of spiritual irony: "Let me out desperately banging on walls that were built by/someone that person was not me." Our perceptions ARE our reality, and our root assumptions have much to do with generating that. So we do have a major hand in creating boxes -- and depth perception as to the true nature of Self is our liberation. We build the walls -- AND we are not that habituated one. A curious state. Seeing-through unfolds over time via steady-state intuition. Zen and the ironies of the acculturated psyche.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so so much Pax... Im sorry it took me so long to write back... I have been very sick. What a wonderful in depth review of my poem.... I very much appreciate it... I will be by to read you as well Thank you !!

[Shaquana Adams]

This felt desperate or frantic. I hope that was the intention because I think it worked really well. Great poem! ^-^
-QuanaWana

[Debbie_Philly]

Yes that was the intent :) Thank you so so much for reading ... nice to meet you !!

[ChemicalMadness]

i think you did well to convey your feelings here, and you took the reader along with you...form, format, punctuation, all did as much work as any particular words which you used....i might arrange my verses differently here and there because i feel you can convey the same feelings while making your words more impactful....but the other feeling i got was that this was a sort of springboard piece...something that you might draw from and come back to later....but that's just me, reading with my eyes and my (questionable) brain ;)

CM.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so so much I really appreciate it :) Yes this was just a fast piece off the top springing from the feelings in the moment... I will most likely go back to it... thank you so much again for reading.

[Mark]

I feel a sense of rebellion against that inner self we all have. That lonely person.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Mark.... yes I felt that way at the time as well !! :)

[Ravyne Hawke]

I can relate to the desperation of being trapped within my own mind... those hidden moments. Sometimes there really is no where to hide.

[Debbie_Philly]

Hi Lori.... yes I agree :) Thank you so much for reading sweetie !!