The Five Seven Five Slide... ;)

A Series Of Senryus that I have written some time ago....I first said Haiku... because it is a type of one.... but a friend reminded me that it is indeed a senryus . Thank you for reading

Winds of change blow by

Through my hair into my heart

Now it is welcomed

Just let go tonight

The moon will carry you through

The darkest of nights

All the lines are there

For you to reach out and take

any time you want

Sounds of the night dance

Shaking the foundation strong

Will stop the silence

My eyes are heavy

The slumbering winds call me

Cozy is my bed

A Series Of Senryus By: Debbie Mills Kelly ( Debbie Philly)

Author's Note

These are a Series Of senryus that I have written some time ago.. Thank you for reading :)

Reviews

[Dhaye]

Lovely Haikus and Senryus...whatever they are classified. Lol. :)
Actually the 1st, 2nd and 4th stanzas can be considered as Haikus because they are about nature like the moon, the wind, and the night. But they can be called senryus, too because there is an emotion in each stanza. The 3rd and the 5th are totally senryus because they talk about other things and how you feel (5th).
But since this is only one poem, this will be called series of senryus. And I love this 5x because I am fascinated with each stanza which can stand alone as a beautiful haiku or senryu if ever you separate them.

You're an awesome writer. Keep it up! :)

[Debbie_Philly]

Wow thank you so much Dhaye.... that means so much... i did write them at different times ans then decided to put it together :)

[Anand Sehgal]

A conflict I can see between the change and the comfort zone :) Loved the imagery :) :)

[Chris]

Awake in the night -
you can dance with the shadows
and call to the moon.

[Debbie_Philly]

I love it.... we should callab some day ;)

[Rita L. Sev]

Smooth flowing, each one - not always easy with senryu and haiku. The third is my personal favorite, but all have a thoughtful quality.

[Debbie_Philly]

THANK YOU so much Rita :)

[John Phoenix]

The slumbering winds call me. Those words were like the sirens beckoning and implies a peace to be found. Very well written.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much John... ;) It was a peaceful thought at the time :)

[Tate Morgan]

That was stunning I( wasnt expecting that. Thank you I am smiling again with a song in my heart.

[Debbie_Philly]

Hi Tate....thank you very much..... its a collection of senryus :) I will be over soon to read you..soon.... I only have one hand to type with :)

[Muse]

I adored the whimsy in this. The ending is where I will be in about an hour..

My eyes are heavy

The slumbering winds call me

Cozy is my bed

Zzzzzzzzzzzzzzzz

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Cobra !!! :)

[Michael Kevin Spencer]

I enjoy your style, easy reading!

[Debbie_Philly]

Thanks Micheal... I'll be back a little later tonight... I'll be reading your work tonight !! ;) Thanks Again !!

[emmajoy]

' Just let go tonight ~ The moon will carry you through ~ The darkest of nights '

That reads and sounds like a whispered prayer ..

Beautiful these are, a chain of lovely colours or jewels, very bright yet subtlety set. You always write clearly yet the themes are so often complex .. that takes great skill, Debbie

[Debbie_Philly]

WOW... Emma what an amazing thing to say... Thank you very much... You as well , I some times read you and some others and think... what great talent !! :)Thank you again !!!

[Debbie_Philly]

Debbie, wonderful 5 Senryu's here... each one is filled with your passion,
and they are written on a right way from up to down... just lovely!
I've done so many haiku and senryu's too, all under construction right now...
But there will be some now and then, in between... I enjoyed this very much,
Thank you.

- Elisa

[Debbie_Philly]

Awww Elisa thank you so much !! :) Let me know when you post them... would love to read them !! :)

I will sweetheart :) xx