~~ FOG ROLLING IN ~~

Fog's Rolling In

 

Fog is rolling in , man is it creepy half a block from the beach

It's 11:30 pm guess tomorrow will be humid

Looks like fog anyway could be the twisted tea's

clouding my vision and I'm laughing to myself cause

I just don't give a S**T

As I'm sitting on the balcony overlooking the Atlantic.

Fog is rolling in it's creepy yet mesmerizing at the same time

kind of like my old boyfriends

Till then I'll just pray the sea creatures stay in THAT direction.

 

By: Debbie Kelly

 



Reviews

[Jack...]

The fog rolling in from the ocean creating a mystical appearance on the night. Grey for miles yet you can still here the surf calling from beyond. This poem was mesmerizing, silent, calm and just a bit eerie, but very well written. I am growing rapidly fond of your style.

[Debbie_Philly]

Wow thank you Jack.... I was down the Jersey shore when I wrote this... it was a foggy and errie night because it was off season...;)

[Jack...]

Wildwood?

[Debbie_Philly]

YES !! :)

[Jack...]

I grew up in Glassboro N.J. and my parents still have a house in Wildwood.
FYI - I have lived in Texas for 30+ tears, but I am still a die hard Eagles fan. Fly Eagles Fly.

[Debbie_Philly]

On the road to victory...lol. Thats great !! ;) I grew up in Philly but went to the shore ( Wildwood) every summer.... it has changed... I miss the good ole days..lol

[Angi]

Ha! Creepy ex~boyfriends made me laugh! Love the last line. I pray the creatures stay away, too! Nice! Angi~

[Debbie_Philly]

LOL Thanks Angi.... its nice to meet you... I will be over to read you in a moment :)

[Steve]

Is it wierd to admit that this made me laugh? I like the part where you compare the incoming fog to your ex boyfriends.....lol

[Debbie_Philly]

LOL... I was hoping for a laugh ;) Thank you !

[emmajoy]

Tongue in cheek here? You've created your own atmosphere, the scent, the feel, the look and lost yourself in a kind of smiling safety! Those old boyfriends certainly had strange personalities !

[Debbie_Philly]

For sure Emma....lol. He was on my mind that night and the fog and all that went with the damp shore night came out in this way...lol. Thank you sweetie !!

[ba_mcfarlane]

Nothing as powerful as the energy of an angry North Atlantic. I am reminded of the memories. Thank you.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you so much Brian... yes you are so right about that.... and at night... as much as I love the ocean... it can swallow you whole... ;) Thank you again for reading and reviewing it means allot.

[blank]

I like the contrast in your work. It varies from the semi-lyrical to, well this. I really like this one. It's personal but its not trying, a sort of pragmatism about the voice that lends to the realism here. Its the kind of realism that gives it an edge, like looking at Sally Mann's photograph, candy cigarette or something. That same attitude, great stuff!

[Debbie_Philly]

What an amazing review.... thank you very much... your right it was my reality at the moment..... but sometimes in my head.. I tend to think this way.... I was looking at the fog... over the buildings into the black ocean at night... a bit tipsy and made myself laugh in my head as well..lol. Thank you so much again for reading and for such a wonderful review :)

[Debbie_Philly]

It was an eerie night for sure :)

[WindSong]

I really loved reading this. Your style of writing is very impressive...I felt I was there looking out over the Atlantic through the fog! I love fog...it's so mysterious and eerie..reminds me of London! Great poem! I'm glad I stopped by... it was well worth it!

[Debbie_Philly]

Ohhhh Thank you so much Windsong !!! Thats so nice to hear... I will come by and read you as well... thank you so much again !! :)

[WindSong]

You are very welcome!

[The Rock And Roll Cowbo..]

fog can be fascinating when you don't have to deal with it... it brings some fun mystery to the human psyche. I enjoyed this poem.

[Debbie_Philly]

Thank you Cowboy !!! ;)

[Chris]

Chuckling here... I remember Stephen King's "The Fog" - short story. The first time I read it - I appreciated having electricity on a stormy eve.

I didn't taste expected emotions here - neither dark, nor particularly tense. I did appreciate the bit of 'tude... and seeming (?) resignation/tired with it all.

Chris

[Debbie_Philly]

HAHA... then you got it Chris... it was just a very playful write... about being down the shore... the fog was coming in and I was being Silly...LOL. Thank you !!!

[Chris]

At one time in Maryland it would have been "a'we wear downy o'shun hawn!"