Losing Lucy

Pain like a flood

Tears, screams, blood

One minute here

In the next an angel, a tear

Heart broken on the floor

Precious Lucy ours no more

grab at the sink, but fall to the ground

And pray to die, for your loss to be found

Reviews

[gypsynight]

Love this! It really speaks to me

[H.L. Cerveise]

This is a great dark sad poem. I am glad you shared it with us. I read your profile and how you destroyed your first writing, I am glad you memorized it. I made a promise many years ago to someone to never destroy something I wrote, I implore you to make that same promise to yourself or someone.

Well done

[Cyprian Van Dyke]

Powerful. Real like. Wonderfully penned.

[d]

i feel like you could write a book about this.

[William Liston]

You did a great job with this poem. The quick, almost indirect and scattered tone you used throughout was brilliant; it perfectly captured the dissonant mindset that can form from unbearable sorrow. Also, the way you "illustrated" hopelessness was amazing: Grab at the sink, but fall to the ground/ And pray to die, for your loss to be found--those lines vividly described human despair. Great job. This poem is almost too good.

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much for your kind words. The thing about this poem is that the voice is one of the truest and purest of any of my poems. This was written in less than five minutes because the words just poured into my mind. This poem practically took on a life of its own

[William Liston]

LESS THAN FIVE MINUTES! Wow; I'm almost jealous. Keep on writing; you're very talented