Matter

Inspired loosely by Glowing Screens by Watsky

There are billions of us

And you think you matter

Theres always some one more of something

Prettier, uglier, skinnier fatter

So what you were the prom queen

There were a billion more

What makes you who you are is struggle

And the soul down in the core

See with billions of other people

Sometimes we feel faded out

So what if you arent perfect

Thats nothing to worry about

Because all the flaws and scratches

Are what makes you you

You have the audacity to matter

Because you really do.

Reviews

[ANTO]

This is a very cool write SP. The title I thought would lead to a scientific type poem on matter - which is okay by me and the poem was a pleasant surprise when it became clear it wasnt that use of 'matter'.
I like the style of this and the sentiment. Its uplifting and positive without putting others down to achieve it.

This gave me a little stumble -
"What makes you who you are is struggle
And the soul down in the core" - I feel that the minimal change required would be italicising the word 'struggle' for readability and a change to the second line of 'the soul' to 'your soul' - just suggestions though.

The final couplet is a cracking 'So take that' ending - a finger snap finish.
Nice one. Thanks for the RR

[Death's Poet]

Thanks so much Anto :) You really made my day

[christopher fox]

Awesome poem!
"Because all the flaws and scratches
Are what makes you you"
Great lines.

[AaronFreitas]

"What makes you who you are is struggle
And the soul down in the core"

I really like those lines and they are deep... lots of meaning behind those. Many people feel when they are cuter or prettier than most that they are special and some of those people become arrogant jerks. What really matters is what you become when you break free from the struggle. Awesome words :)

[Death's Poet]

Thanks alot Aaron :) I'm glad the message came across as strongly as I was felt them

[Abilash Uttama]

Loved the lines
What makes you who you are is struggle

And the soul down in the core
And another point I liked is nobody is perfect and there is no need to be perfect just keep improving yourself. A nice motivational poem.

[Death's Poet]

Thank you Abilash You always have such insightful comments on my poems and it makes me think even deeper. I always apreciate it

[Abilash Uttama]

You're welcome:)