Snakes

So this poem is me bearing my sould over something that happened to me when I was younger. This poem was hard to right and isn't quite finished yet but I am proud of it

Oh the innocence of a girl in her youth

Who wishes to believe all men tell her is truth

In her naivety she met a man, more a snake

And once he left, her innocence he did take

But, alas I digress, may I not skip ahead

For in order of action should this story be read

By mere chance one day their paths did meet

He was clever and witty, she was pretty and sweet

He gained her trust, though this wasn't too hard

She gave it willingly, for she was not yet scarred.

Enamoured with him this young girl became

Though he was not, he pretended the same

One day in a house, as the story runs its course

What she said no to, he took by force

Though she cried and she fought, the snake did not care

The hell she went through, left her and her soul bare

Finally when the torrment did quit

He thought he could win her back by his wit

The saddest part is, for a while this proved true

She returned to her abuser, as most broken girls do

For a while she stayed, while her senses were dull

Then one morning she woke, and found herself a fool

Out of her life, this snake she sent away

And out of her life, the snake did stay

Except for in her dreams that is,

Where each night his memory lives

The innocent girl with the bright, happy smile

Forgot how to be happy and laugh for a while

But thankfully this is not where the story ends

For the girl was strong and so were her friends

Though she is not the same as she was before the snake

Though her innocence gone, her strength he could not take

Out of the ashes that girl did rise

Now aware of the snakes and denying their lies

Though her innocence the snake did take,

The girl he stole from he wasn't able to break

Author's Note

I'm still working on some of the flow, I know a couple lines don't go as smoothly as they could

Any opinions welcome!

Reviews

[Taylor]

I.chose this poem bec I have a phobia about snakes, so of course I was surprised by its content. I admire your courage and you express very well how insidious abusers are. They are snakes! Keep working on this. I am sure you have much more to share. You are justly proud. I like the fact that you also can stand up and say that; a "broken girl" could not.

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much for both the praise of the poem and the personal encouragement. It truely means alot! :)

[Not Your Typical New Yo..]

I admire your braveness for sharing this. These types of poems, or just writing in general, aren't easy to write. It's tragic, and it'll haunt you, but writing it nevertheless helps to put the rage and sadness away. Thank you for sharing.

[Death's Poet]

thank you for your kind words. I'm glad you guys enjoyed it

[Gowan J. Volga]

I liked many aspects of this. Thank you.

[PonoEllis]

The poem does have some rough edges but its greatly written compared to me and a great poem nonetheless.
I can understand that it is hard to talk about but all much the braver to say that it truly happened to you. so thanks for opening up to us

[Death's Poet]

thank you so much for your kind words!

[PonoEllis]

no problem :)

[Abilash Uttama]

A sad yet powerful and hopeful story, the content is very strong and impactful. A superb piece!

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so very much

[Nene]

such passion.... Brought tears to my eyes.... Its very well written... Flows beautifully... The story told through the poem was sad yet hopefull and strong.!!!!! Salute to the girl... Thanx for sharing!

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much Nene. This was a hard poem to write but If one girl going through the same thing reads it and realizes that it gets better than It did its job

[Nene]

It is truly hard to write down the truth. You did a great job!!

[Death's Poet]

Thanks again Nene it means so much

[Nene]

Any time :-)