Broken Clocks

A poem about stopping society from ruining people

In a sea of familiar faces

She stood all alone

And the clock ticked on...

She didn't speak and wasn't spoken to

But she was surely spoken about

And the clock ticked on...

Though no hands were laid on her

Their words cut just as deep

And the clock ticked on...

The cuts on her arm fueled their fire

And their fire fueled her knife

And the clock ticked on...

She wore her pain on her arms

A scarlet letter screaming for help

And the clock ticked on...

But no help came

And so she stood still alone

And the clock ticked on...

One day her knife didn't dull her pain

And the sadness overwhelmed her

And the clock ticked on...

That day she had enough

And she cut a bit deep

And finally, her clock stopped.

Many broken watches can still work

Unless we ignore them until it's too late

Don't let their clocks stop...

Author's Note

All opinions welcome

Reviews

[Abilash Uttama]

i agree with your viewpoint, rate of suicide can be reduced if we will be available for those who are depressed and are in need of company though i'll add this too some problems ought to be dealt personally and they are essential we should endure and thrive. nice work!

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much!

[Abilash Uttama]

welcome :)

[PonoEllis]

amazing poem, the message is so true as well

[Deonte Briddell]

This is awesome. All we have is time until we have no more.
I love "In a sea of familiar faces
She stood all alone
And the clock ticked on..."
So real and great way to set the tone.

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much for your kind words!!!! :)

[Jimmy Yetts]

A dramatic poetic plea for showing greater empathy and concern to the obviously troubled--that more suicides might be avoided.
Laudable, Shadow!

[SheIsMe]

This one hits home. Very well written as far as capturing the pain and how time is the their of all souls

[Death's Poet]

thank you so much! Im blown away by how many people enjoy this poem. It gives he hope for the human race

[Zorrin86]

Nice poem. It seems that we're often little more than cogs in the machine of society. It can definitely have a dehumanizing influence on people, where common decency is subordinated to profit and personal gain.

[Nene]

It's a meaningful poem.... What you conveyed through it , is well understood. I once saw a programme on why people commit suicides... Your poem summed it up!!! The main problem was that people around them didn't help them... They want someone to stop them, someone to come to them and say everything will be ok.... They wait and wait and when that someone doesn't come they leave this world alone....

[Death's Poet]

I agree, its a sad world we live in where we wont help those crying out for us. In a sense that makes them just as bad as the bullies, It's a difficult subject to talk about but it's one that definitely needs to be talked about and fixed

[Nene]

True awareness among people should be spread to keep their eyes, ears and especially their hearts open

[andrew mitchell]

A powerful write so incredibly displayed you wanted to reach out and help this poor soul in despair. you weaved your magic on this one on a subject that's very sad. A great write

[Death's Poet]

Thank you so much! I'm so glad that the message is getting through so well. Hopefully we can all change some lives

[ANTO]

This made me want to know and to want to try to understand why this behaviour happens. It is a successful write then, I feel. Apart from that it is very tight and well constructed poem. The ticking clock keeps on ticking. If i asked what could I do for this 'cause' - a word I loathe to use - what would the narrator say, do you think?

[Death's Poet]

From the standpoint of this particular writing I was trying to make people understand that they can help. Even if it's only by being there for a person going through struggles. Her cuts were practically her body screaming for help, but in the end no one came, and in her solitude she ended it all. One of the worst feeling of the human condition is the feeling that we are alone and not cared for. Being there for the person, and not just watching bullying happen can make a huge difference in anyones life.

[ANTO]

I understand. I know that prior to reading many pieces on here about cutting, I was of the 'thats just weird' school of thought but now I try to not judge and to understand, since I was the first one to say to shrinks that no-one wanted to understand my problems. This 'type' (for want of a better word) of write does eventually have an effect, so kudos SP. Dont stop.

[Death's Poet]

I was also one of the people who couldn't understand why anyone would cut as I have never cut myself. However, my best friend of many years began to cut and so it came to effect my life too as it did hers. Thanks for the kind words and encouragement. It means alot

[ANTO]

YVW - take care :))