Dust and Me

I presented the relation between dust and me in a dramatic manner

I wiped the shirt covered by dust,
With frustration and discomfort.
It was the filth beneath my shoe
Trying to trespass through.

Ignoring the thoughts
I walked it past,
But suddenly huge wind starts blowing,
Dust also starts flowing,
Taking the shape of sculpture
Like my shadow in the mirror.

Thunders reverberate in mind,
A scene flashed of my dying.
As dust's sculpture and me joined.

Reviews

[Elliot B.]

I love the conclusion! Great imagery!

[AcasualPawn]

Thanks elliot b. For accepting the request and giving it a glance. I hope you like it

[Abraham George]

nice idea and good work. keep writing.

[AcasualPawn]

Thanks George for accepting the request and giving it a glance. I hope you like it

[EJ's Horror]

Yes, agreed, I was born in a Dessert, dust can only be descibed as a four letter C word, which I will not utter. Thank you for sending the Read request :)

[AcasualPawn]

Thanks ejheather for accepting the request and giving it a glance. I hope you like it

[Great Aunt Astri]

Yes, I think you presented the relation between dust and you very well. This is really quite a clever poem. Sometimes the dust just won't leave one alone. I love the clever 'vision' at the end, 'dust's sculpture and me intervened' (Just a thought, would intertwined be a better word?) Well written poem.

[AcasualPawn]

Poem overall means
I have discomfort with dust

But in the end iam gonaa assimilate into dust...

So its dust and me intervened

[Tony Jordan]

'Intervened' was the thing that had me quizzing too.
A poor choice in an otherwise fine, inventive piece of writing.

[AcasualPawn]

I just get it.. Imade mistake ... I will change with joined

[Tony Jordan]

That makes two of us then - you were entirely correct with astringent :)

[AcasualPawn]

Ya did you tried my other poems...
They are more dramatic..

[Great Aunt Astri]

I'll have a look too. {:

[AcasualPawn]

Dust and me, basically depicts the general truth in dramatic way that in the end we will become dust itself