To my Suitemate

A poorly made vent that I wrote in less than ten minutes! Hello World!

You’ve got problems of your own, I’m sure

But could you put some padding between our doors?

Though your credit hours are 24

you never seem to nod and snore

i know you find me such a bore

But please heed my calls implored

to my ear you're such a sore

and my sleep cycle has become so poor

from austin you came and became a chore

to deal with and your habits I abhor

you insult my home and its activities

for they don't meet your proclivities

i know you came from a big city

and you find OK to be so gritty

but how can you act so nitty

while saying we’re as bad as Kansas City?

I know my venting is rather poor

the sleep you've stole has sapped my mind

so my skin and bones cant spare much rhyme

And while I know you've got the same test time

your money shows you don't care to try

You've got problems of your own, I’m sure

But could you go to sleep, you gross man-w***e?

Author's Note

Need help with syllable count, grammatical and capitalization errors are not important, spelling is, so tell me if I used the wrong spelling.

Reviews

[Laura Lynn]

9-11-9-8-8-7-10-10-11-10-9-10-8-11-9...last line is 10, why syllable and not accentual?...well accentual isn't modern and open to interpretation granted. You either want to say nitty like nitty gritty or needy, but I don't know how important that is if it is I don't know. I am very curious about the places mentioned. It's a shame I could not have been better friends which I have met from various locales; in my younger days perhaps we could have traveled to each others towns of childhood or homelands, sounds funny but I regret "about it"