Poison's Toll

"I've seen more spine in jellyfish, I've seen more guts in eleven-year-old kids"- Brand New, Seventy Times 7

 

Poison’s Toll  

 

Alas! She has been spurned,

Branded with the mark of a fool.

 

His words were poisoned with lies,

Disguised by petty tidings.

 

She granted her trust,

Bestowed it unknowingly.

 

She gifted her love,

Innocent and foolish.

 

Oh! But now!

She broods silently.

 

Her anger flaring wildly,

Fear rearing its’ ugly head.

 

She has slain her pity,

For he deserves it not.

 

Revenge,

Sweeter than the best of treats.

 

For she is bitter,

And alone with her hatred.

Author's Note

haha, i was really pissed off when i wrote this one, so please excuse it if it's kind of lame :)

Reviews

[Aj]

ahaha...thats how i've felt a couple times after the end of a relationship...lol the boy in my story that you reviewed was me...lol and this is what i felt...and you've captured it in the form of a poem..Awesome!!

[Alice Oiseau]

Hey hon, this ain't lame. This is powerful. Very strong and full of rage. I love it. I love any time there's revenge in poetry and better yet when it's the lady seeking revenge! It's just so twisted! Excellent write Nora.
Cheers.

[Legion]

I can tell, but even with the tone, I still think it is a great write. You should read a piece I wrote called "Blood of the Scarecrow". Might find some familiarity within it. Good work.

[Phenomena]

No it is definitely not lame!!!!! it's constructed as if you deliberately wrote this on purpose instead of on accident!!! One of my faves!!!!=D