The Out Of Body Experience

Hello little girl I remember you,

And once upon a time you knew me too.

I remember your face,I remember your smile,

I remember everything you thought,

I remember all of your feelings.

And I remember how much you are utterly nothing.

You're so stupid, you're so sad

You're so clueless, you're so thoughtless.

Your brain is nothing but a deep dark abyss,

You smile but your eyes are lightless.

You think you have friends but in reality you're friendless.

I wish I could go back just to hit you.

I wish I could go back just to knock some sense into you.

But time doesn't work like that, so I'll say this only one time.

Don't be the follower be the leader.

Don't be so kind to the people who try to destroy you.

Don't have manners they are worthless in your time.

Don't care about your "friends",Focus on yourself.

But these warnings won't do much help,

I know that they won't.

Hello little girl I remember you

Once upon a time you knew me too

I remember your face,I remember your smile

I remember everything you thought,

I remember all of your feelings.

And I remember that you are utterly nothing.

These people that you call your "friends" are nothing but an illusion.

Your heart is way too big for this world ,

Your life is brought up from confusion.

I know your just a little girl stuck inside this picture.

I know your just a fake reflection stuck inside this mirror.

I know that when I leave this room you'll be a faint memory of me.

I know that as I walk away you will shed from me slowly.

As I walk out the door I'll say one last thing before I go.

Goodbye little girl with the pigtails,

Goodbye little girl that I no longer know.

　

Author's Note

Yeah,I'm talking about myself.

Reviews

[Alexis]

For whatever reason, this poem is almost making me emotional! It's really strong and amazing. But it makes me feel kind of sad in a way. You've given some wonderful advice that I've actually heard before!:


"Don't be the follower be the leader.
Don't be so kind to the people who try to destroy you.
Don't have manners they are worthless in your time.
Don't care about your "friends",Focus on yourself."

I was able to relate to a lot in this poem to be honest. I find myself thinking some of the things you state in the 7-11th lines. They tell me not to think such things, but it can be hard.
I like how you repeat the first 6 lines. That adds a little something to it and I like it.

"These people that you call your "friends" are nothing but an illusion."
Gah. Those lines are so powerful and emotional to me. I always worry about being alone and not having friends...

This was a great write. I seriously loved it. Keep on writing!

[Chris]

Very strong and relatable. I'm sure we've all taken a look at ourselves, wondering why we were how we were and sometimes wishing we could go back, to knock sense into our own selves.
I appreciate the honesty in this.

You ended it perfectly, with a bang.

[☯]

Such a strong and inspiring poem. The way you've written this to yourself takes on a whole new toll. The way you talk and look at yourself in this poem is like someone bursting out of their comfort zone. I can also relate to this, and though when you're growing up, you just want to be yourself, but you don't know how, so you leave what was holding you back. Magnificent write :)

[Angie Diane♥&hea..]

This was a good write. I know how you feel though. I wish I could do the same thing with myself too...I feel like a misfit all the time. So I can relate to this as well. Good write...

[Searching 4 Serenity]

Strong viewpoint of oneself. Though, the forth stanza, with all the "Don't", is not something I'd want to practice heavily on. I relate, because I was always a misfit as a kid.

[Vanessa Rico]

So deep...I can relate to this...I had often felt out of touch with myself. I look back on who I was and I barely recognize myself. It is sad sometimes to realize that you lost that innocence...but then you wouldnt be the person you are today...powerful write

[Thomas Fitzgerald]

Very dark and almost horrific in the sense of taste and sheer impact, a well written piece, good read.

[GlamGirl]

Oooh! This is creepy! I like the ending. If it wasn't so darn hot in my room I would have goosebumps. :/
Great write!