The Thing Is After Me

Living this broken life,

with such a heavy load.

Sometimes I want to give up.

Sometimes I want to let go.

Tortured by my failures,

Dying by my very soul.

It is the fault of the thing,

who won't leave me alone.

　

As I breathe in the faint smell of blood,

fresh from my wrists.

I try to think of a happier time,

a time much better than this.

My memories are faint,

and all I have left are fears.

I try to remember but all good thoughts

have disppeared.

　

I'm scared,alone,hungry and cold.

My everything has been destroyed,

so I don't have a home.

The thing is everywhere I turn.

Watching.

Waiting.

for the time I'm not looking

so he can get me.

　

It's so dark,

and I'm petrified.

The thing that won't leave is now

inside my mind.

I'm on the floor,I can't breathe!

I'm...I'm suffocating.

　

I see a... light?

But theres the thing!

I want to run,

but whats wrong with my feet?

I'm going towards that evil man!

I get to the light and he offers his hand.

Into the light,

Into my new life.

Reviews

[Ryan Gonzalez]

Interesting poem. Nice writing and a very interesting view that can be taken in many different ways. This could be a bad or good thing the end hints. Maybe the evil man is not as evil as he seems it hints at. Or maybe he still is and this is merely just another option that still has no happy ending. It seems all up to the reader. Great job!

[fireblossom]

A strong poem of the young girl destined to be somewhere and someone. This is the poem of the artist who must put their art first. What you call evil may be in the eyes of those you leave behind...perhaps the ending will reveal that he is simply someone from somewhere unknown to you.

Very interesting writing. Good writing.

[Searching 4 Serenity]

I love the message of repentance offered mercy and repentance in this one.

[SilentScreaming]

I can feel the fear and hurt when i read this poem. And I agree with Twinkle, I also noticed how you started off with darkness and finishing on a lighter term, towards the light.
I really like it and you're a great writer.

[☯]

The hurt and agony in this poem almost makes me feel as though I'm hopeless. This is a really nice poem. It's beautiful and dark at the same time. I like how you first started with darkness as your company, but ended in the way towards light. I really liked it, Great job :)

[A.G Franke]

shows alot of deep agony and depression. It's ironic how happniess that we used to have can make it all the worse. As welll as knowing we should be happy but where not! Good work! =)
A.G