All My Negative Thoughts

There is nothing left of me.

Cut me open so I can bleed.

Surrounded by your mindless

greed.

May my broken soul

rest in peace.

 

These are the thoughts of a corrupted mind.

These are the beats of a battered heart.

These are the fears of an over emotional soul.

Hold me over the edge and let me go.

 

As darkeness engulfs my startled

mind,

a tangled truth will now unwind.

Fearing what is make believe

Deny the fear thats choking me.

 

These are the thoughts of a corrupted mind.

These are the beats of a battered hearts.

These are the fears of an over emotional soul.

Hold me over the edge and let me go.

 

Pray to a god that isn't

listening.

Ingore a pain thats suffocating.

Wish a cure for the sickly stars,

shining a promise to damage hearts.

 

These are the thoughts of a corrupted mind.

These are the beats of a battered heart.

These are the fears of an over emotional soul.

Hold me over the edge and let me go.

 

 

Author's Note

This is actually a song.(If you can imagine that)And feel free to say anything
you feel.

Reviews

[Awkward]

Before I even read it the picture gave me an erie feeling!

As I read the Author's note I was thinking yes I could totally imagine this being a song
I would imagine an artist like Otep singing this!
Thank you for sharing!

[EvilAngel]

You're really amazing. I play guitar and i would love to have someone like you as my lyricist. I noticed we like a lot of the same bands too. This is really a great song. hopefully one day ill turn on the radio and there it'll be;)

[Attaxer]

Would you mind If I put music to it?

[GlamGirl]

I really like the rhyming flow of this poem/song. It has lots of emotion. Great write!

[Joey Irwin]

I love it, its very deep. I could definitely imagine it as a song. In fact I recognised it as a song before reading your note :)
As usual with your writing...Brilliant :D

[Damon Favreau]

I like how deep it is :D

[State of Grace]

Wow, This poem is absolutely amazing! The flow is beautiful and I can feel all the emotion you poured into this and I can completely relate.

[Holly O'Brien]

I love this!! You make it flow like a really depressing song...but it is one I would listen to lol. I really like this particular line "Hold me over the edge and let me go."

[Dushyant Thadani]

All these lines and verses you've written have so much emotion and sadness. Every line saw so much pain in it. Beautifully expressed. Great job.