I Am A Tree

I am a tree
In that way I've realized that I touch others
although standing still
And stand tall, my branches reach further
I am special
I have the ability to touch the lives of she and he
without ever moving
For I am a tree
And this ability was given me naturally
I've learned to even reach those out of range
It was odd at first, even strange
But when I realized my leaves were needed
to shield some from the rain
my leaves were no longer restrained
Also in the winter time I trained
to help them gain
my source of shelter
from whatever the weather
including shade from the sun that swelters

I attempt to relieve prey of their predators
by creating ripples in inconvenient places
They escape to the safest of places

I help as much I can
I lend a branch
I send out leaves
I touch other trees
This is my life
until man comes...
and ends me

Reviews

[KL]

This has a lot of potential. I know it's hard sometimes to start off a poem with non-rhymes and then lapse into rhymes, but I think if you focused on this and kept it nonrhyming (like with the first eight lines) this would be fantastic. Although the content was consistently great, the sudden implementation of a rhyme scheme gave the poem a muddled up feel, and rendered the flow not so consistent. Keep working on it, don't think you're quite finished on this one!