Dismay

Dismay

Look into my dreams
and see into this tortured
soul
an inadequate manner of
subservience
pivoting slightly on the
exotic renewal
of efficacious descent
drunk on the demeanor
of one in an erotic
display of a
gradual decline into
depreciated gain
to my dismay
I fear I am
dislocated
Left to suffer in silence
and find progressive renewal
within the fire of my own
desire

Author's Note

Be kind....:)

Reviews

[J. Alfred Prufrock]

i love this one, the words flow vonderfully, pulling the reader along with your thoughts and imagery, like a musical waterfall, until we drown in the emotional torrent. well done

[Deandra Dawn]

:) thank you

[icaros13]

"I fear I am
dislocated
Left to suffer in silence
and find progressive renewal
within the fire of my own
desire"

Damn. Do you know me? Did you peer into my being and read my soul? I don't mind suffering, I do it with great skill. I'm still looking for that "progressive renewal within the fire of my own desire", though...

[Laura Maidah]

Is this all one sentence? Wow. Well, I will be kind. I find the word "efficacious" very effective here. It's one of my favorite words.

[Cali-D]

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[MoriartyMesa]

Well, it is never lacking in visual, emotional and non forced wording. Hope you decide to enter this into something, and always totally bewitching..........