Misfortune

Misfortune

Billows of sensations
in a seething sea of
communal misgivings
a brief and inane moment
to degrade and defy
the water's commotion
an indistinct yet
infectious configuration
as a veiled felon
in the nighttide
filching your breath away
droplet by droplet
satiating your lungs
while crashing upon
the jagged rocks of
your hollow misfortune

Reviews

[Michael X]

Point break is a suffocation, sometimes it is best to let go then start
over versus suffering in the thought of a misfortune or unlucky event,
something like a ship that continually beats against the rocks until
each fragment is torn away, and taken by the current of an emotion.
I rather enjoy the moonlit craft and the ocean captured like a breath,
that of fleeting sustenance. Beautifully written my friend ^_^

[Simbake777]

The misfortune of suffocation is described beautifully, here -- the rich level of emotions as defined, by this gorgeous rendition; is nothing short of raw and beautiful, in all its sadness and ugliness! Definitely a favourite!!

[Haunzwürthe]

I like the change of perspective of a tumultuous surf. Great imagery.

[Pax]

great with a lot of metaphor used. well done write.

[nigrum homonculus]

im always amazed at how much emotion you pack in your poems. and your wordplay is just crazy. really well written.

[Rusty]

Great Write!

[Southern Cross]

The flow of this piece was like waves on a stormy sea. Combined with word choice it carried me away till I felt as though I would crash upon the jagged rocks myself. Beautifully composed in every way.

[MoriartyMesa]

This made me think of William Wordsworth, the flow, the thunderous emotions, it really brings me to mind of a great old Aussie actor named Leo McKern, standing the cliffs of Dover.


Brilliant, beautiful and always loving

[♥ Kinnixk]

I love the vocabulary in this. I got a clear picture in my head while I was reading. Great job (: