Obituary

Obituary

A Poem by Deandra Dawn

Obituary

She crashed within the limits
of her unbound delirium
her incessant annihilation
of her pleasures
a frantic distrust of
everyone
all around
blood boiling over with
starving inadequacy
a crass portrayal of her
disease
stricken with hate
forging normalcy
until the end
Her ways taking her down a
beaten path
to hell
complete unrest
vindictive fantasy
leading to an untimely
demise
of her mind
her body
until she was gone
a passing memory
quickly forgotten
left behind
to collect dust
for eternity

© 2012 Deandra Dawn


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i absolutely love this

Posted 12 Years Ago


This piece is a showcase of the aspects of your writing style that I enjoy... Of course, your original, tasty word choice, but also that feeling of spiraling downward that I get when I read some of your poetry. Smashing!

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

I would definitely not want this to be my obituary........dark......brilliant

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


Such a sharp blade is wielded in this poem...troubling, haunting. Very powerful...

Dungeon-dark...hope the glimmer of hope is still alive with the lady..



Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

The image you paint is very dark, sweaty, human, and blow for blow one punch to the reader after another. One swing to the eye's for assault, one to the stomach for pain to the heart.


Lovely job.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

You express so much, utilizing so little... and yet it is so you... Bravo.

Posted 12 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on May 29, 2012
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Deandra Dawn
Deandra Dawn

Orlando, FL



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My name is Deandra Dawn and I have been writing for as long as I can remember. I also go by the name, Ravishing Raven, and I am currently reworking my website. What else is there to know when there .. more..

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