No title yet

The fear in her eyes
said a thousand words
meaning lost upon disillusion
a hallucination
founded upon obscene logic

Author's Note

This is just the first stanza...

Reviews

[MoriartyMesa]

While reading, i felt the female spin of this http://www.youtube.com/watch?v=TxwuB6xPcvs

[Coyote Poetry]

"obscene logic" would be a good title. I like this poem direct and honest thoughts. Obscene logic can lead us to dangerous places. A outstanding poem.
Coyote

[Whiskurz]

What a witty write.....I enjoyed......Whisk

[An owl on the moon]

Each word is so perfectly placed, creating vibrant colors and feelings on the canvas of the mind and heart... Truly look forward to seeing more as you share your colors with us.

[icaros13]

This may be just the first stanza, but in my opinion, it stands on its own. You have said much in few words. Sometimes, less is more...

[Everett DeValle]

Wow, you invoked so much imagery in such a few lines...some times, we lose faith, it happens, yet the strength of a person, is to keep moving forward in a positive notion, even when, logic doesn't make sense. Excellent write, Deandra.

[Tate Morgan]

ThaT DESCRIBES HALF THE WOMEN I HAVE EVER KNOWN I had a girl friend once who was ruled by emotion and no amount of logic would sway her

[Audrey Howitt]

Well, it makes me want to read more for sure!

[Cathy Wattam]

Well, if this is the first - where are the rest? I want more. Keep it coming.....

[Lorna]

I know it is only the first stanza, but the 'untitled short' is so perfect in its own little way. You don't give away anything but you tell everything needed to know. Maybe keep this as a poem on its own? And update the rest as a different poem all together. Brilliant.