Her Tears

I just came up with this...might still tweak it.

Her Tears


I could see the turmoil in her eyes
before she turned her face up to the skies
tear by tear
drop by drop
a piece of her soul
washed from her eyes
and she cried
still cries
burning eyes

Reviews

[r. f. jordan]

this looks to me to be a form poem of a tear beginning to swell beneath an eyelash. the tone is melancholic and the movement from past to present in the last two lines is a powerful touch. "a piece of her soul washed from her eyes", to me, is the core of the piece. your creativity is admirable and the compassion within this speaker appears nothing short of a gift.

[Ezekiel Silver]

This is a really good poem!! Short, simple, and vivid. Nice work!!!!

[nigrum homonculus]

the imagery in this is great. i love the emotion in this poem.

[Brittany]

This touched me. I love the imagery. Well written.

[Everett DeValle]

Wonderful...I know this pain, and you hit the nail on the head with this poem...I love that about poetry, that each poem I read I can relate, this I relate greatly. And I love the spontaneity of your emotions for you to write it on the spot.

Write on, Deandra.

[MoriartyMesa]

Either a guitar or maybe a something with a string and you have a nice song.

[Dream Weaver]

No need to teak this, 39 words of ruefulness
delivers a powerful impact. Nicely done...

[koty bell]

lovely pretty write i liked this one alot:)

[MOON]

Lovely write, like tear by tear , drop by drop the way you put it together.

[Simbake777]

One word -- Poignant.

Definitely worth subscribing to your library over!! :)