Crisscrossed

May not mean anything to you but it is everything to me....

CRISSCROSSED

Moonlight dances,

catapulting delight and

veering into the direction of

another careless indiscretion.

Warm hands and soft lips.

Averted gaze, still life.

Admissible advances are all but lost,

left to wander through an open cloud.

Seething emotion

with fulfilled denial,

adrift a grievous misdirection.

Ingenious loopholes on the rug,

she says....

Undeniable whispers are

desperately incomplete and

feathering off into the existence of forever.

A blind eye to its inevitable conclusion.

Always alluding to,

the unspoken,

miserable

connection.

Reviews

[Brad Dehler]

This is a rollercoaster ride. It reminds me of Beat poetry with its rumbling and frenetic tone. Very good

[lawrence bear]

Interesting piece. A feeling of being left out by one you care for, a feeling I get from this.

[andrew mitchell]

I loved the flow of this write somewhat racy, fast but chaotic. This was an entertaining and wonderful read. Nice work:)

[Deandra Dawn]

Thanks so much!

[andrew mitchell]

you are welcome!!

[Re-Pete]

Something that most of us can relate to at one time or another in our lives. Lust happens. You write amazingly well. You've captured the moment & the feeling perfectly with choice words. Great title too.

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you!

[Terrance]

This was a wonderful read, and really it inspired me to venture deeper, this was great writing, the visuals were really there as I read through each line.

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you so much!

[Dmi]

First and most importantly this write of yours "Crisscrossed" is the flippin cut lil Mz. Thang. You wrote a piece here that reads as if it molds together. Very, very well structured. Line after, line, your vocabulary usage is pin point and lends to the flow of your poem. I'll openly admit I rarely read as much as I should. With that said this poem of yours is dope, period. Fantastic, wowed me, wouldn't say that if I didn't mean it. Thanks for sharing.

[Deandra Dawn]

You are amazing! Thank you sooo much.

[Dmi]

Nah, Thank you. Wish I wrote that for f**** sake. I'm currently crushing on your wording........;-)

[Deandra Dawn]

Crush hard love...just give in to it :)

[Dmi]

LMAO.....Touché......Nice.....

[BThomvanWart]

Wow, this is definitely a road I think everyone walks at some point. I can still remember nights where these exact feelings lead me into a few bad and worse situations. It's a very great write! I love the ending the most, but perhaps that's because I always feel like that's what happens once it's all over, you're left with this miserable connection to someone you wish you were never connected to.

[Deandra Dawn]

You absolutely nailed it. Thank you so much!

[Gee]

A road I drunkenly staggered along, to many times, in my youth. You write extremely well

[Deandra Dawn]

I appreciate it, thanks so much

[James Alai]

Beautiful. Passion is definitely a two way road riddled with potholes.

[Deandra Dawn]

It definitely is.

[Cobblestone Traveler]

Brilliant. Your word usage-averted, lost, wander, adrift, misdirection, incomplete...I can feel the intense ache of the unsatisfactory. The frustration of the anticlimactic outcomes. Excellent write!!

[Deandra Dawn]

Thank you!