All That You Left Here

I wrote this some months ago, when my ex left me... and i like it. I've been thinkin of transform it into a song for my musical project.

All That You Left Here
 

 

My memories are intense
Remember makes me fall
Now nothing makes sense
Now I can’t answer any call
Can’t think or speak at all

The walls can speak

Writing curses on the floor
My fingers can’t feel any cold
All that you left here
Let me die for a night
To remember how I feel

Any smell, any sight
I rather turn off the light
The clock mark the hour
Eternal seconds to count
I can’t think or speak at all

The walls can speak


J.Roberto

Author's Note

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Reviews

[crashandburnplz]

I really like it.

Though I'm going to assume 'Remember makes me fall' was supposed to be 'Remembering' Haha, sorry.
Little things like that bother me.

[MockingJuliet]

Wow, my boyfriend and I just broke up recently and this poem is so honest to the feeling. I really like how you said the walls can speak. I related completely. It was wonderful. If made into a song, even better.

[Alucard]

I have been here and it is not easy, I am even afraid to pick up the phone sometimes. Good poem but would need a longer chorus if mad in to a song. Thanks for sharing.

[TiaVictoria]

Hmm. I like this, majorly.
I'm into writting songs, so I kinda hummed something along. (:
Great writting.