Elusive Promises

Elusive Promises

A Poem by Daytonight
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broken dreams

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Elusive promises
are love's illusional dreams
given fairy wings 
they just fly away.

Pixie dust
building sky castles
for daydreaming princesses
that just disappear.

Magic wands creating
glass slippers that don't last
when the clock strikes midnight
everything turns to ash.

© 2011 Daytonight


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Daytonight
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This reminded me of Jimi Hendrix's Little Wing in a way, some of the word choices reminded me of it. I heard the song live by Brett Marlar last Thursday and it was amazing. I am also partial to Concrete Blondes Version as well. great write and way to capture a poetic fantsy like that.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.




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For some reason my review didn''t go through... I love this poem! :) and this time you switched it up away from romance. This poem really made me look deeper. I loved it! Good job and keep on writing!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Loved it sounds like your muse Vixen made an appearence after all lol. Make the next stronger VENT the pain in poetic verse sis and make me scream Hell Yea.

Pixie dust
building sky castles
for daydreaming princesses
that just disappear.

Perfectiion, keep em' coming

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

i just love the way this sounds sis!!!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This line is so beautiful:
"Magic wands creating
glass slippers that don't last"

This poem is really wonderful, it made my heart light... loving it... A magical piece*****

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Terrific Poem. Makes one feel elusive!! Well penned!

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Great poem, love the use of words. Wonderful:)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

This reminded me of Jimi Hendrix's Little Wing in a way, some of the word choices reminded me of it. I heard the song live by Brett Marlar last Thursday and it was amazing. I am also partial to Concrete Blondes Version as well. great write and way to capture a poetic fantsy like that.

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.

Ah I so used to dream of castles in the sky,of à princess waiting , but alas all turned to dust:......excellent poetry :0)

Posted 13 Years Ago


1 of 1 people found this review constructive.


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Added on June 27, 2011
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Tags: Sad, Nougest, Thoughts, Pain, Personal

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Daytonight
Daytonight

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I am a hopeless romantic who still believes in happily ever after. I have a passion for writing poetry. My poetry tends to be tender sensual love poetry with some heartbreak along the way. I also l.. more..

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