I WROTE YOU THIS BIG LONG MESSAGE AND WRITERSCAFE GOT STUCK AND WIPED OUT MY WHOLE COMMENT. I WILL MAKE IT SHORTER THIS TIME. NEWBORN IS ONE WORD. CONFUSION IN THE 2ND STANZA 3RD AND 4TH LINE. MAYBE IT'S ME. IF YOU WANT TO YOU CAN EXPAND THIS POEM TO SAY ABOUT HANDS AND LOVE. HOW YOUR HANDS ARE FOR LOVING OR FOR LOVE. JUST A SUGGESTION. THE POEM IS GOOD. I KNOW YOU ALREADY TALK ABOUT LOVE BUT IN A DIFFERENT CONTEXT. KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK AND FOR ASKING ME TO REVIEW YOUR POEMS
I loved the contrast here, and I could really feel some of the images you described. Great flow, and some really sweet rhymes in there too. To improve, you could expand on it a little more - include a few more examples, for example, but I only say that because I want more xD Brilliant work well done :)
Very interesting. Hands can be soft and gentle or they can be rough and hard. A baby u would use gentle hands. Hands are good for a variety of things. I sense you have had a good experience in this dept. Good poem
Great poem, the emotion is very real and clear, yet it sort of shifts as the writing goes on. Good word choice and rhyming. Good job and keep up the good work :)
I wish I knew how to put this into words. Your poems are more than poems. They somehow remind me of strands of silk. Sometimes it feels as though you are weaving something tender, sensual and through these great feelings I linger a while to read again your lovely words.
I like this, I love work that highlights the complexity and contrast of humanity and this one does that. The various phases we go through, loving parent, big brother, then to our nighttime selves ;). Very sensual piece :)
I am a hopeless romantic who still believes in happily ever after. I have a passion for writing poetry. My poetry tends to be tender sensual love poetry with some heartbreak along the way. I also l.. more..