Underneath Moonlight

In the darkest of the night

when the moon is shining bright

like a lantern with the shield removed

while stars twinkle as they approved.

Pen to paper in softest touch

describing I miss you so much

pouring out my tender heart

right from the very start.

Scribbles streaking across page

flowing with my love throughout the age

caressing parchment as the verse

spells out love for better or worse.

Underneath moonlight when scribbles flow

trying to express how much I love you so

magic is born from paper and pen

when lines appear and words begin.

Author's Note

Image: Photobucket

Written May 23, 2011

Reviews

[Mickeyboi]

Hello - here again , loving this one. what about removing the gerund from L2 and going to when the moon shines bright. - Gives a more immediate image to the reader, the meter slots nicer into L1 as well but admittedly would fells odd going into the length of L3. I don't write rhyming pieces - reason being too much to consider, am lazy and inept at counting syllables! :)
Some very nice images in this poem, and some original phrasing - love scribbles streaking {again might lose the gerund?} Also in final S is there another word for scribble - what about scrawlings - or did I just make a word up??
Loving the sentiment can totally relate!
Mike

[Nicky Wilson]

This is absolutely amazing I especially love the second stanza !!! and just as you told me "keep penning" :) Brilliant piece!!!

[Verslayer]

It's a love poem of such tender words...your image is second to your thoughts here...and moonlight is so romantic...
Rob~

[Amera]

This is a lovely rhyming quatrain, filled with imagery that delights the senses. Standing ovations!

Love,
Amera

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

nice...

[Cherry Lai^_^♥~~]

Nice...