Falling away

Just a little something that popped out of my head and onto a page about change

There are petals floating on the oceans surface

  Drifting with the wind and tide

     Each one a memory,

        Each a dream of days gone by

 

Watching them pull away

The bleeding sun

As it drips in the horizon.

 

I feel the life I know pool where I can't quite see;

        There has always been this lingering feeling

            That one day

                These fleeting moments

Will leave me naked to the undertow

With dreams of wind and rain.

Reviews

[Samoda]

I sincerely loved this... I heard some terms that were knew to me, 'these fleeting mom....."
loved it!

[uzair zahid]

Nothing remains in its bloom forever.... One day it has to wither..
A good imaginative piece.

[Steve]

You are indeed a poet! I like the line especially about the sun bleeding. Well done.

[~Beautiful Dreamer~]

Oh.........my...........gosh this is really good!

[Fabiana]

Thanks!

[Nick.B]

Great imaginary and very descriptive, great job

[justthatgirl34]

Very visual and a really really good job :) Keep up the good work

[.]

This is a very vivid and beautiful piece,Fabiana. The stanza "Watching them pull away
The bleeding sun ,As it drips in the horizon" is so amazing, and your whole poem flows very well. Great job :)
-Cord

[Jack...]

Very beautiful and descriptive. I love the feeling of peace that this poem ignites. Very nice.

[bob, small b. aka invs]

wow. this is wonderful writing. dreams of wind and rain. what a beautiful phrase.

[Aehr]

Breathtakingly beautiful. :) Great job.