Heartache

                          

 

                                  Heartache                                  

   

My heart isnt a play ground

not something you can use till you get sick of it,

and move on to another.

My heart is a precious thing,

not somthing you can just break,

and go to a jewler fix in two days.

My feelings are true

not a horror movie with unreal

stunts.

My pain is indescribable,

no anesthesia can over come.

One day you'll see.

One day you'll feel.

The same thing like

what you put me through.

One thing is certain

you will regret, and you wont forget.

You wont forget the day i tell you

i dont feel sorry for you.

Your just another,

heartache.

 

 

 

                                  

Author's Note

All thoughts welcome. im not a pro.

Reviews

[bluessadmood]

love is torment but i have to love i always told myself stay and enjoy your peace,but love is always on the call ,you will never live if you do not try me ,again and again,yes love is many heartbreaks,but still we love its taste,loved the feelings here,wonderful

[Akroma]

Love the content. The poem started strong, but I feel lines 7-11 need to be reworked.

Here is a quick edit (not perfect, as I mentioned before I think you need to reword a few lines. But I fixed some misspellings and contraction errors)

My heart isn't a playground,

not something you can use till you get sick of it,

and move on to another.

My heart is a precious thing,

not something you can just break

and go to a jeweler to fix in two days.

My feelings are true,

not a horror movie with unreal stunts.

My pain is indescribable,

no anesthesia can overcome.

One day you'll see.

One day you'll feel

the same thing like

what you put me through.

One thing is certain;

You will regret, and you won't forget.

You wont forget the day I tell you

I don't feel sorry for you.

You're just another

heartache.



Peace man! Keep on writing

[Staci Brown]

kewl groove is felt while reading this one. could definitely hear this one being read aloud at a poetry slam. short tho

Faerie Blessings!

--faerie whisper (breaking the silence...)